My Silent Companion...

Walk with me,

Keep me company as the lone moon rises,

And the night air chills,

And the stars dance across the sky.

You help me to focus,

To set my sights on the morning,

And run blindly into the future until we collide and become one.

Sweet Clarity.

 

Dive with me,

Into the vast sea of knowledge that looses me,

Help me search through the time,

And the tides as they pull me, push me

Farther and deeper from the shore

That i struggle to grasp with the tips of my toes,

And the empowerment of my voice.

Wonderful Prose.

 

Lay with me,

Hold me silently through the night,

As the past creeps up my spine,

Latches to my soul, and tries to steal me from my slumber.

Keep my mind from running away

With the demons of my past

Down a road i can not follow.

Dearest Strength.

 

Climb with me.

Up the mountains of adversity,

As they grow taller and more treacherous,

We will dodge the danger,

And together we will see them succumb to submission and sink

Back down into solitude

We shall rise far above and beyond.

My fair Endurance.

 

Stay with me.

Hold my hand gently as the seasons change.

Help me to forget the things I've lost,

And surround myself with the ever changing colors of the fall,

As I laugh through the pain,

And grin through tears that once flooded me with dead weight.

We shall be reborn,

Most beloved Acceptance

 

In the light, in the dark,

walk with me,

oh my Savior-

blessed be. 
 

Author's Note

I love critisism so don't be shy...

Reviews

[Marina]

This absolutley amazing.
The way you used words is incredible.
It's so creative.

"Dive with me,

Into the vast sea of knowledge that looses me,

Help me search through the time,

And the tides as they pull me, push me

Farther and deeper from the shore

That i struggle to grasp with the tips of my toes,

And the empowerment of my voice.

Wonderful Prose."

Wonderful.

XxStaysweet,
Rina

[Craig]

Your poetry I think tell allot abou you. Who you are what you feel. I like you. Each poem like a lonely star waiting to shine.

[Anima Inspired]

I like the way that this piece shows "growth"...and the final line "Most beloved Acceptance", seems to ring as the strongest theme in this piece. You've written with a quiet intensity...almost like a storm brewing, but not quite breaking, you know? I like the tone of this piece. Nicely written.

[D. Nelson]

this is fantastic! its the first piece of yours' that I've read and i'll definitely be reading more.

your use of words is fantastic, i love the way you started each stanza "(verb) with me" and ended it with those statements about emotions and feelings.

by far my favorite stanza has to be the third

"Lay with me,

Hold me silently through the night,

As the past creeps up my spine,

Latches to my soul, and tries to steal me from my slumber.

Keep my mind from running away

With the demons of my past

Down a road i can not follow.

Dearest Strength."


Great write!

[Delilah Dunn]

Wow. And you ask me what I'm doing at Results? The truth is that Results is not the place for you either. Your word choice in this piece is not only eloquent, but powerful as you personify your personal qualities and speak of them even as they were your friends. I found this piece to be particularly touching, as introspection is something that is very important. (How can one know other people without first knowing onesself? Not only do you recognize these things within yourself, but you also describe a longing to know them more, which is all the more admirable. Do not believe for once that you are anything less than a provocative, eloquent, and soul-touching writer, whose talent and potential are boundless. Someday we will BOTH be famous.