Do You See

Do You See

A Poem by LovingJoy

More sly horses have bolted,

another pay-later party is over,

on hands and knees in the grass

vainly seeking a four-leaf clover.

You dance out of sync.

to a tune piped into your life,

you're fine on the brink

of a freebie with a price.

Running over hot coals

- but the strip never ends,

losing sight of your goals

soon all energy spent.

Dance madly to the wicked tune

openly mocking your innate grace,

the obvious made apparent soon,

some set hurdles to rig the race.

© 2013 LovingJoy


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I like this too, nice poetry do you have, keep sharing

Sincerely Panda

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like this. Life as a party, waiting for the hang over. nice work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Most kind Mark, spot on, thank you.
Such insights cost earning... sorry you had to, really.

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Okayyyy, thanks for the clarification, Chris. Your remarks are very true in this sense.
Chris

7 Years Ago

You didn't need the clarification... you hide well though.
LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Not necessarily so perhaps, but a witty remark all the same and appreciated.
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Ees
This reminded me of the dreams that I tend to have.
Great poem. Thinking about the price that we all pay for what we live.

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the read and review Ees, much appreciated.
This is a wonderful poem. s uch lovely lines

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Thank you, most kind of you.
Vidya Bacchus

7 Years Ago

You are welcome
"vainly seeking a four-leaf clover.

You dance out of sync.

to a tune piped into your life,

you're fine on the brink"

A very nice poem. I like those lines the most...:)......................

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Hi, thanks Sami, your kind words are much appreciated.
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)....................
this is deep and worth reading several times. I like it, very disillusioned! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


LovingJoy

7 Years Ago

Inertia makes for slow replies, my apologies... Many thanks Joie, really glad you see it that way. .. read more

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Added on November 16, 2013
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