Do You See

More sly horses have bolted,

another pay-later party is over,

on hands and knees in the grass

vainly seeking a four-leaf clover.

You dance out of sync.

to a tune piped into your life,

you're fine on the brink

of a freebie with a price.

Running over hot coals

- but the strip never ends,

losing sight of your goals

soon all energy spent.

Dance madly to the wicked tune

openly mocking your innate grace,

the obvious made apparent soon,

some set hurdles to rig the race.

Reviews

[☾Panda☽]

I like this too, nice poetry do you have, keep sharing

Sincerely Panda

[Mark]

I like this. Life as a party, waiting for the hang over. nice work.

[LovingJoy]

Most kind Mark, spot on, thank you.

[Chris]

Such insights cost earning... sorry you had to, really.

[LovingJoy]

Wow, your comment is a bit of a riddle as yet, but "Such insights cost earning" makes me think I understand...
Experience and eyes open do help to see the circus casino world as it has functioned for decades (if not centuries) for what it is, if that's what you mean. Thanks for taking the time to see the content, not the wrapper.

[Chris]

I don't see any riddle at all. To have a valid insight means you have to have lived the moment, hence the price was paid. Each insight costs... each breath is earned. We earn our nightmares.

[LovingJoy]

Okayyyy, thanks for the clarification, Chris. Your remarks are very true in this sense.

[Chris]

You didn't need the clarification... you hide well though.

[LovingJoy]

Not necessarily so perhaps, but a witty remark all the same and appreciated.

[Ees]

This reminded me of the dreams that I tend to have.
Great poem. Thinking about the price that we all pay for what we live.

[LovingJoy]

Thanks for the read and review Ees, much appreciated.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is a wonderful poem. s uch lovely lines

[LovingJoy]

Thank you, most kind of you.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome

[Sami Khalil]

"vainly seeking a four-leaf clover.

You dance out of sync.

to a tune piped into your life,

you're fine on the brink"

A very nice poem. I like those lines the most...:)......................

[LovingJoy]

Hi, thanks Sami, your kind words are much appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Joiedevivre]

this is deep and worth reading several times. I like it, very disillusioned! :)

[LovingJoy]

Inertia makes for slow replies, my apologies... Many thanks Joie, really glad you see it that way. Better disillusioned than labour under a delusion!