Attack of the P-zombies

Lump in throat, ache disorderly,

need a qualia-lude to swallow it,

won't hurt with a little philosophy,

not sentient, not cognisant, a stint

at fifteen minutes = anywhere taken!

Swimming up to the surface you think,

so why does your thing keep aching...

the higher you get, the lower you sink.

Can't let go of some adult teddy bear,

keeping your mind and soul from failing,

stuck on a dirty train going nowhere,

pity pray they'll see your heart breaking.

Oh, my friend, it truly sucks that much,

p-zombie, hate to rain upon the parade,

in the end everything swallowed up,

not the slightest trace of us will remain,

give it time, it all disappears to start again,

our I dids and my alls sucked into a black hole,

it's all recycled over and over in the end,

so what will happen to each pretty little soul...

Eternal oblivion blows the wind out of sails,

but hang on in frightful hope of another turn,

it'll all cook up to billow more cosmic trails,

so don't cry p-zombie, none of this stuff hurts.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Swimming up to the surface you think,

so why does your thing keep aching...

the higher you get, the lower you sink.

Can't let go of some adult teddy bear,

keeping your mind and soul from failing,

stuck on a dirty train going nowhere,

pity pray they'll see your heart breaking."

People try , people fail . people swim , people drown all in the scheme of the grand things. It is interesting you talk about frightful hopes for some people do fear the future...Bravo

[LovingJoy]

Thank you for the lovely comment, you are so right in your remarks, much appreciated. We can become desperate to reach somewhere/something that in the grand scheme of things is a waste of positive energy turned into fear and disappointment.
Thanks for taking the time to read, dear poet, I hope the week goes marvellously for you, whatever you do, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You too dear poet...Much obliged...:)....................

[Bob Sherunkle]

That was amazing!Great flow,and a few things in there to really think about.Great write!

[LovingJoy]

Thank you for reading the poem, and for the kind words, Bob.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Wow madam lovingjoy(lol) This is such an interesting piece .Your lines are beautifully ceafted to send your point home.I am thinking that the more you try to succeed at something the more you fail.We need to let go of the past sometimes or it will drag us down.I got this message loud and clear in booming tones.This is my interpretation and I am sticking to it .Yet again I think a great piece

[LovingJoy]

Many thanks for the read and for thinking about the words, much appreciated, especially as I'm still not sure what it means myself...! Your comment is of help and it's nice of you to be positive about this, thanks.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome dear poet:)