The Last Email

The Last Email

A Story by V. Lucien Maier
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this story is a bit personal. It was born between a discussion between me and my father about an idea for alternative energy.

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© 2009 V. Lucien Maier


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V. Lucien Maier
its a personal story that I just had to do.

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I found it intriguing simply because of the idea, but your storytelling ability was quite a plus. I didn't expect to life this because I'm more into fantasy than science fiction, but I have to admit that this was quite a pleasure to hear. I agree with Faerie_Kitten that you should do writing as well for the hearing impaired, but from my perpective it was a great story (I'm not deaf). The only thing I can really complain about is the lack of a human aspect to it. As far as the characters go, it felt a bit metallic. Perhaps, for future reference, you should add little things...like names. Anyway, great job and continue writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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What a most ingenious way to relate a story.
Zang!! (I aoplogize for the slang). This was a great story. Natural storytelling skills, no doubt.

Done? Not before I can read/hear more of your writes, please.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lucien Maier

5 Years Ago

plenty more at Lucienmaier.com
Very nice work. Just think if there were an alternative and the energy. This was a great piece. Started by one simple e-mail exploding into hope. Excellent job. I even liked the last line. The pause before it was great.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I found it intriguing simply because of the idea, but your storytelling ability was quite a plus. I didn't expect to life this because I'm more into fantasy than science fiction, but I have to admit that this was quite a pleasure to hear. I agree with Faerie_Kitten that you should do writing as well for the hearing impaired, but from my perpective it was a great story (I'm not deaf). The only thing I can really complain about is the lack of a human aspect to it. As far as the characters go, it felt a bit metallic. Perhaps, for future reference, you should add little things...like names. Anyway, great job and continue writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This isn't a bad story; I liked the main idea.
However, it kinda lost it's credibility at the email point. That an engineer could email the Governator himself seems very improbable to me. Otherwise the governor would be swamped with emails from every person in CA that wanted to save the world or help the environment or get him to buy an enlargement.
This made it lose its credibility for me.
Also, at the beginning of scene number 2 you begin with 'He held his head in his hands'. WHO is this, holding their head in their hands? We're not sure which of the two men it is.
I think you should do some research and revise this story; it could become a rousing and hope-filling tale of human ingenuity and loyalty, but it needs some fixing.
Good luck.

~Scott

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I would really like to see the audio in text for those who can't hear or are hearing impaired.
I don't think it's fair toward those with those disabilities to be left out of a wonderful story.
All in all that is my only issue with the piece of writing.


Posted 11 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great story! I really liked it! The plot was excellent! Details, descriptions, narration, everything was so cool! :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pretty cool idea for a story
i liked it

and i liked that it was an audio file, not text
cause to tell you the truth, i wouldn't have read it if it was a text file
i dont like to read stuff on here thats long like that xD

but it was good, i enjoyed it

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

interesting...... I really liked it. Great job

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hmm. really interesting. but i had a hard time listening because i'm more of a visual... er, reader. but i liked the idea and though i could not see the words, it was quite evident that the writing was really well done. good description.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

hmm. really interesting. but i had a hard time listening because i'm more of a visual... er, reader. but i liked the idea and though i could not see the words, it was quite evident that the writing was really well done. good description.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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V. Lucien Maier was born in 1973, in Amersfoort, in the Netherlands. His father a civil engineer had a love of travel, and both parents loved skiing. When the opportunity arose to move to .. more..

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