No Broken Heart

No Broken Heart

A Story by LunalitSol
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drabble from the POV of a "heart broken in two". Written for Weird writers' prompt group.

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         No Broken Heart

I’m just an organ, y’know? I pump blood through your veins, capillaries, arteries, I keep you alive. I’m the thing that lets you stay  animated, upright. So, I don’t understand what I did that people blame me for…everything. Falling in love, heartbreak, panic, fear, really any form of emotional pain; it’s all my fault. But it’s not! I swear it! Blame me for the blush on your cheeks; Blame me for my thrumming beat as you lean in for that first brushing of lips; But please, please, stop blaming me for your pain. Stop calling me broken. It’s not my fault…it can’t be my fault. Please…don’t make these things my fault. I’m begging on bended ventricle here! I’m still making your blood pump! I’m still beating and humming and keeping you alive, and I don’t understand why I get blamed for all these things when I’m working and trying and working so very hard to let you continue to exist in the first place! I can understand I guess…if I try really hard…blaming me for the pain in your chest, for the splitting sensation of heartbreak and longing and terror of being alone. The location is tricky I guess…But…I just…I wish people wouldn’t do it, you know? It’s really…It’s not my fault. I promise. You’re not dying of a broken heart. I’m not broken. If I was you’d be dead, right? I’m whole and I’m here and you’re still alive and, really, once in a while, a little gratitude would be nice.

© 2010 LunalitSol


Author's Note

LunalitSol
the prompt was:
Write about a heart broken in two's and it's point of view
(I know, I twisted it a bit. It's a tad repetitive. Still....)

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That's the point, I give you a prompt and you twist it, change it, rearange it, as long as it's stays on track. The point of prompts is to train the writers mind to expend their thoughts, to make them think differently, to get used to writing things they might not always get to write. So, I think you did a fantastic job. This story has improper grammar, is off balance, BUT! Hun, ya did awesome and that's the point you made...The grammar I don't care about as long as I can read it, and the off balance part...well the point of the reader is to be able to think and if the writer takes that away it's not much of a read (So I've been told.) And you didn't take that away! So, this is amazing, I love it and it's out of ordinary. It's an impressive story. Keep up the good work!!! I LOVE IT xD
p.s. I love the words you used to describe it, they're very powerful...AWESOME!! c:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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thats crazy stuff excellent write:)))

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow this is the cutest thing i have ever read in this site.

I heart you now

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That's the point, I give you a prompt and you twist it, change it, rearange it, as long as it's stays on track. The point of prompts is to train the writers mind to expend their thoughts, to make them think differently, to get used to writing things they might not always get to write. So, I think you did a fantastic job. This story has improper grammar, is off balance, BUT! Hun, ya did awesome and that's the point you made...The grammar I don't care about as long as I can read it, and the off balance part...well the point of the reader is to be able to think and if the writer takes that away it's not much of a read (So I've been told.) And you didn't take that away! So, this is amazing, I love it and it's out of ordinary. It's an impressive story. Keep up the good work!!! I LOVE IT xD
p.s. I love the words you used to describe it, they're very powerful...AWESOME!! c:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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