still worth

artwork by felix mas

back then i knew

even if i didn't admit it

our dreams didn't mesh

and they never would

it was a relationship based on the suspicion of failure

and a pulsating promise of perhaps

yet it hyperventilated and died a prolonged death

ending up a chalk outline on a sidestreet of life

still, in rosy fleshy memory

i remember it as the suggestion of summer

hot and steamy

a romantic novel with french phrases

impossible to put down

a lilting tune playing on a moonlit beach

yes, a vibrant love destined to live on

through some sort of adolescent eternity

and still worth a heavy sigh and a smile

Reviews

[Neville]

I sense a moment of looking back and reminiscing fondly but with a long and accustomed acceptance of the inevitable.... I've had a few such moments myself, as I'm sure most do... and yes, they never fail to draw a sigh and smile or two...... characteristically beautifully crafted my dear friend........ Neville

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Neville. I always appreciate your lovely reviews. Lydi**

[Neville]

..................x

[Einstein Noodle]

great ride Lydia! we forget the pain and remember the good ... the architecture of this poem is spot on .. at the end i felt as if i experienced the whole thing ... didn't miss a beat of what you are putting out .. now... i may be all wrong .. but if i am ... its still right ... right?! ;) well said .. closing line is perfect for me
E.
ps. only read once and felt it ... read it again for the feeling
pss. this line also blows me away "it was a relationship based on the suspicion of failure" ..and i like the natural turn in the 2nd V.

[Lydia Shutter]

E, you have it spot on and your review has made my morning brighter. Thank you so much! Lydi**

[Alfred Kukitz]

Swooned in your metaphors, a hint of reality in the making while fantasy plays the game. Great writing Lydia!

regards,
al

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Al...keep on swooning through the weekend. Lydi**

[B. Boileau]

A life chapter worth rereading over and over leaving you somewhat heavy hearted. This is truely a summer romance put to ink.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much. Lydi**

[sette]

wow looking back at something bittersweet in the past makes a person wonder what if... ? but then still the memories make you feel grateful that there was that one time in your life that you have shared with that person

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Sette. Lydi**

[redzone]

such sweet youthful memories you pen Lydi... and yes these memories often have that 'summer' feel to them... "nice" reading your poetry Lydi, you always give me the 'sighs'....

[Lydia Shutter]

The memories can stay youthful far longer than the bones! Thanks for your "nice" review, Curt. Lydi**

[charlie]

The "so wrong it's right" relationship is detailed thoroughly in this poem. Full of imagery and passionate story lines.

[Lydia Shutter]

Thank you, Charlie. I appreciate your review. Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this. I do believe that those loves we passed through, but didn't scathe us so harshly, become this sort of fondly remembered tapestry of love as grow older. If you had told me as a teen I'd be chatting as old friends with some of those first "loves" and enjoying their current lives, I'd not have believed you. Yet here I am. A lovely and thoughtful write, impeccably presented in your own style. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Thanks so much, Lyn....it is wonderful when we can chat with old loves and reminisce...absolutely. Lydi**