Writhe

Writhe

A Poem by Aurora (MC)
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Wept

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(-Art By MC)

See how cruel and heartless you have made me, 

See how hard I am being on myself, 
See what you have done to me! 
Every breath struggles to get in, 
Each inhale fights a war, 
Each nerve of my body has been shook, 
My breakdown isn't so far. 
Don't you see how hard, I have been fighting, 
Still you have no pity on me! 
You caused me isolation inside, 
And humiliation exposed out, 
This isn't my, fate you get it! 
I would have smashed you if I didn't feel weak. 
I am sick of being around you, 
Hate seeing you all laughing at me inside, 
I reached the point of hating you for being alive! 
See you made me so alone, 
So insane, I started to hate myself, 
I tried to run off from this pain. 

I get through pains, 
Through my verses, through my poems, 
Shame on me for hiding a lot, 
And letting you all go away like that, 
Bleeding me brings you pride, 
Doesn't this poem brings you shame? 
I am fine to have such shameless things around me, 
I am fine, I see you can't care, 
But you know what, you are bound to bother these verses, 
You are bound to hear my screams one day, 
Know, I won't forget, I am saving it in each nerve inside me. 

Thanks for reminding me, I am alone, 
Thanks for telling me, I am not that insane, 
To go mad at you all, 
You'll see, I'll make you feel miserable one day, 
And you would run to hide your shame, 
You will struggle even to look up into my eyes, 
And regret for all that you've done to me. 

I don't give a s**t to you anymore, 
As you don't deserve me, 
Don't worry as you broke me to the fullest, 
Now see how, I am going to make it up again. 

See how you've caused me bleed, 
I writhe and squirm the mental pain you gave to me, 
Now it pains so much physically, 
But I promise, to get through this again, 
I am not going to die because of this mere pain, 
I promise to enjoy my days to the fullest, 
And that, without you! 
Don't worry if you lose me someday, 
Take care of your trapped souls! 
We will meet with this moment again, 
With pride or with shame, 
It's all your choice!




© 2019 Aurora (MC)


Author's Note

Aurora (MC)
I don't know how long I have to go through this. Would like a review, and shall be glad.
thank You!

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As always, you never fail to amaze me. The emotion in this poem reminds me of slam poetry. You establish a bond with the reader by explaining your pain. I definitely see improvement as well. You have gotten a lot better at turning those emotions into art, into sentences, into poetry. You play at the heartstrings of the reader, and that is always something that improves a poem.

The picture is such a sad and angry one in its own beauty, that is is perfect for this poem. Great job!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

I have no words left except a "Thanks"... "Thanks for everything".
I am glad you enjoyed the .. read more
I like this poem a lot, it shows fresh emotion, before there's been a chance to calm down, and long term lingering emotion that never really goes away, even if you keep trying. It makes me feel bad but wonder if maybe she blames everyone else a bit too much.

I did notice some type-O's, in the second verse on line six you said brings when you meant bring. in the first line of the last verse you forgot the 'to' in 'caused me to bleed.'
also In the third verse on the second to last line I think it would sound a little better if you said "...look up at my face" instead of 'into my eyes,' I think it would be a bit smoother, but it's fine the way it is too.

the last thing I'd like to mention in my long review is the picture. the girl sitting among all the chaos. The screaming faces that seem to be begging for something, the monster staring her down, the subtlety of her wings and how they also subtly look broken, the heart at the bottom that looks like a collection of arm. It's truly a master piece, and the fact that it all makes up a circle which symbolizes something never ending, maybe I'm looking far to deep but I feel like that picture has a lot a deep meaning.

well done MC
-WF

Posted 5 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

Wow! You really went so deep! I am glad you extracted so much from my poem and artwork and let me kn.. read more
A brutally honest, sad and hurt, filled poem of anger, frustration, and loneliness. That makes you feel for you so deeply and make us want to give you a hug and comfort you. And tell you we know life is far from easy. But never let alone put you down or hurt you. Be proud of who you are for what you are a beautiful soul. That has a good heart, a clever mind and a wonderful spirit.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

It's so kind of you dawn! Thanks for making me feel better with you words.
Dawn

5 Months Ago

No not just words MC Aurora sweetheart the are true. I mean them. :)
This is such a desperately sad write but brutally honest. I think you pack this freeverse full of vitriol, defiance, anger and hurt. I do though think you could have said it in a shorter piece and it may have had just as much or even more impact.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

I am not good at writing short poems, I haven't learned to enclose lots of feeling in a few words ye.. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

5 Months Ago

You have to trust that not all poetry is epic in length!
"payback is a bi---!
He will get his...what goes around comes around...lots of power in these words...i am down but not out...and i will rise from the ashes like the phoenix...really powerful poem and such interesting artwork that you did to pair with it.
j.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

Thanks for the review!
Your poem speaks loud and clear, you have crafted it in a powerful way.

And...

I say make time for those who have time to love you, and if you're pain falls on deaf ears save your pleasures for someone who will take time to care.
PS great choice of art work.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

5 Months Ago

You have no way out sometimes, and you need to drain out all the pain in your head so as to make som.. read more
Agyani

5 Months Ago

That's why it is important to have people around you. If you want speedy results, being by yourself .. read more
Cherrie Palmer

5 Months Ago

I understand the feeling of being stuck. So start with idea (really believe it) that what overs say.. read more
Your poem shows how it can be with depression, where you start hating on everyone & finding illogical reasons why your pain is everyone else's fault. When I get to this point, I usually go incommunicado becuz I do not want my identity to become as being a hating, blaming person, becuz that's my depression talking, not really me. One problem with expressing the hate one feels inside is that it pushes people away. Just when I need people, I push them away with my blame & hate. It's a very hard cycle to break. Your poem is one of the most honest depictions I've ever seen, as far as how depression can also be a hating thing, not just a crying thing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

6 Months Ago

Thanks Margie! It's not just depression, I feel is something more than this. I know I can't simply h.. read more
barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I am bipolar, which is the ups and the downs. I do not want to diagnose someone, but I have recogniz.. read more
I agree dear Poet.
"I promise to enjoy my days to the fullest,
And that, without you!
Don't worry if you lose me someday,
Take care of your trapped souls! "
The above lines. Great wisdom shared Aurora.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


Aurora (MC)

6 Months Ago

Thanks for the kind words.

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