Short Hike

Written to recover from my day

 

Trees with multi-shades of green

Chipmunks play and birds screech

Birds and butterflies float upon the breeze

So many sights to be seen

Meant to be just a short walk to find a plane

An old crash site with a story to tell

I no longer care as my body is consumed with pain

What started out so picturesque has become my own hell

Thought I was up for a short hike today

But forgot I’m so out of shape

 

Author's Note

Be brutal

Reviews

[Mioki]

The way this was written seemed insightful, but also had a slightly funny edge to it. The end made this poem unique. Your observations of nature had a good diction, and the overall feeling of the poem was powerful, although not too overpowering. There's nothing to be brutal about in my opinion, except for the fact that this poem is brutally thoughtful.

[cquig]

Hahaha, I love it. So beautiful and then so truthful!!

[TheKaylaPup]

lol, i agree with koufos, the comic twist is great.

[H]

Haha, I love the comic twist at the end. Some of the words/sentences feel out of place. Birds 'screeched' is one of them. 'Become my own hell' is another.