The Broom

A poem for a friend...

Yes its true, I am a mess.

Everything I touch seems to break.

Of ruin, I’m the Empress.

The Queen you’ll learn to hate.

 

I smash the plates, I chip the glass.

I crash the car, I’ll break your heart.

And I'll turn the house to ash.

And that's probably just the start.

 

But I promise this, it’ll be alright

And while it may not be soon.

I’ll find a way to make it right,

I’m the mess and I’m the broom.

Author's Note

Written in reaction to Apatheia's poem "I'm a mess." Quick and it may not be perfect, but that's the point. Who is?

Reviews

[Southern Cross]

All is good as long as we know we have to sweep our own mess. Hell it's a start .

[MachinaWriter]

Yeah, another poet on here wrote a poem called "I'm a mess" and I felt like writing this in response. I'm glad you agree with me. As long as we can sweep up our own mess, its alright. We're our problem, but we're also our own solution.

[Dr. Wood ?]

clever little twist...Empress has a 'P'.......Other than that pretty good

[MachinaWriter]

I wrote it with a P lol But I'm glad you liked it.

[Circe]

yes absolutely, the cause and the solution, that's what we are, this was so apologetic in a way, felt sad for that girl about to turn the house to ash, and having to double the effort to make it right again, makes me want to leap in there and help her!

[MachinaWriter]

lol Thank you for reading it ^^ I did this as a response to Apatheia's poem "I'm a mess." so it was an attempt at looking at it in a positive way.

[b.platte]

I really, really liked this! I mean, I think I like everything about it. I can't believe you just threw this together. I think this is one of my favorite things I've read all day.

I love the listing off of things that "the queen of ruin" does wrong, and even explaining there's worse to come, but then saying she'll make it right because she's the broom to her own mess. Kind of like she recognizes all her flaws but she's willing to be independent enough to correct them herself.

great work. :)

[MachinaWriter]

Thank you. I wrote this after reading Apatheia's poem "I'm a mess." which can be found on this site. She left a comment on this poem, so you could find the poem through her page. I tried to write in the same vein as her poem, but with a change at the end. Thank you for the wonderful comments ^^

[Apatheia]

I love it. Its a perfect description of how I feel half of the time. I'm really impressed even if it is short. :)

[MachinaWriter]

lol I was hoping you'd like it. I couldn't not do something when I read that poem. We may cause messes all the time, but we've all got it in us to clean them up, too. Glad you liked it xD

[Apatheia]

Exactly :) Im glad Im an inspiration.