Analysis

A voice whispered to me this is you, wake up.

As through some trap door in my mind I fell,

I sat in a place between what is and what’s not,

In nowhere and everywhere under a spell.

I stand and turn my shadow after the sun,

The only way to see is with your fingertips,

I try to find the square root of minus me,

Failing, I press my thumbs to the voice’s lips.

My throat closes up like a tulip at night,

Close to blindness I view the white wall,

Cigarettes, vodka, flickering sad images,

A perfect swan dive into my downfall.

I sit across from myself, face to face,

To confront the truth inside of me

We rock ourselves in this damaged boat,

A shipwreck seems tender in this angry sea.

Mother always hidden behind my eyebrows,

Tries to shout over the fury of the waves,

The wind gathers pace and hushes her cries,

Pushing her back to the sleeping one’s graves.

A human tongue cannot say what we agreed,

But floating on the water’s glittering dance,

I look to chasing the living present.

Giving myself and happiness a second chance.

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Very powerful imagery, especially, "A perfect swan dive into my downfall". Sometimes it is painful to take a good look at ourselves, but unless we do we run the risk of never achieving our full potential.

Thank you

Chris

[Madeira]

Thank you so much Chris for your kind review

[Mrudula Rani]

Excellent self Analysis! I loved the brilliant conclusion.."I took to chasing the living present. Giving myself and happiness a second chance". We have to be kind to ourselves that is the least we can do after enduring self examination!

[Madeira]

Thank you so much Mrudula for your kind review, I am so pleased you liked it

[Mrudula Rani]

You are welcome. It's entirely my pleasure.

[CD Campbell]

What a very powerful piece of self reflection. Reminds me of how we can be our own worst enemies and at the same time, with a flip of a switch, be our own greatest hope. I enjoyed this. CD

[Madeira]

Thank you so much for your review, I am glad you enjoyed

[Terry L & Linda L Shuff]

Most insightful, self reflection is necessary in life. So well crafted

[Madeira]

Thank you so much for your comment really appreciated

[Pete]

"I try to find the square root of minus me," - favorite line

wonderful writing. such powerful imagery. the truth can be difficult to face. we do a lot to avoid it but it is always there staring us in the face. hopeful ending. nice job, i really like it ... :)

[Madeira]

Thank you so much Pete for your kind review, I am so pleased you liked it