Breathless

Written 3-22-14

The captivation from your pupil dilation was left coursing through my veins with new found elation

You're nothing short of miserable and amazing, (a tingling sensation) such a lovely fixation

But fear and frustration is your saturation, so immerse yourself inside of your favorite sedation

Forgotten words and lost conversation leave me shivering in the wake of this anticipation

F**k this inclination towards your invitation, discredited by my own sudden deprivation

There's no explanation for this fascination, only pain from my constant lack of consolation

Decorate me with your devastating desperation, you severed all the lines in our communication

This separation only serves to sober my intoxication, so check my vitals then stick me with a vaccination

My validation is just a lie wrapped up in accusation, so suffer silence inside your self-imposed isolation

….and while you're at it you can free me from this preoccupation, all we have is what we had and it's infatuation

Concentration versus contemplation...self deprecation is only good if it's in moderation.

Just consider me fucked with an exaggeration left lonely and breathless from exasperation

The meaning only changes with interpretation.  

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

this is a very clever poem
i love it
it has a rhythm like a rap song
i can imagine someone singing this as rap
am i correct?
i like it is original different very clever and rhythmic
esp love the end verse line
thanks for entering this into my comp

[Twizzler]

Thank you so much! It just came to me one night while free writing... I never expected it to come out the way that it did.

[I Am Svetlana]

This poem truly did leave me breathless, I must admit. From beginning to end, each line reminded me of a hospital. Gave me chills! And I realized that the certain words that lie beneath the longer lines could honestly create an entire new poem by themselves and have a new story and meaning. Or perhaps the same. I loved this though.. Definitely adding to my favorites!

[Twizzler]

Thank you so much. This poem just came to me one night...I had a lot inside waiting to spill out and this is the result. :)

[I Am Svetlana]

It's beautiful!

[Echoes of Eros]

Your words just pound with an intensity of thought and emotion, driving and deep. You have this gift of creating an atmosphere with your voice, and filling it with fire. Brilliant and bold.

[Twizzler]

Thank you! I'm glad it resonated with you, I appreciate your kind words as always! :)

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I loved this Malerie:) I was blown away with it:))))))))))))))))))))))

[Twizzler]

Thank you! I really like this one too. It all just flowed out and came together.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Yes it really did:))))))))))))))))))))) I loved it very much:) I just did one like you to see:)

[Chris]

Gawd... I picture you saying this aloud and what comes to mind is damn, she got through it. The way you strung the thoughts together was delicious and twisted both. I enjoyed the "voice".

[Twizzler]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you felt this...that's what I aim for.

[Justin]

A lot of different emotions in this. Thanks for sharing

[Twizzler]

You're welcome and thank you for reading!

[Wabbajack]

This is quite haunting. So many elements of a love poem but at the same time they've been weaved together with heartbreak and accusation and confusion. Seems to me like an emotional struggle; two completely different parts of you are vying to establish a truth.

[Twizzler]

Thank you for reading and you hit the nail on the head.