My Eyes Are a Flare

This girl has been in my mind for weeks and weeks but i really don't know anything to do

Ever since I laid my eyes on you,

I can’t get you out of my mind,

I find it funny that I can’t even look at another girl,

Till I get my chance with you,

Every girl I look at makes me think of you,

Every time I see you I can’t say hi,

Everyone tells me that I’m creepy for liking you,

One grade apart,

There’s nothing to worry,

I’m not like those others guys,

All I want is one thing

To love someone,

Someone as special as you

By Matthew Hardy

 

April 23, 2011

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Very sweet and sincere. I just noticed one typo--"on grade apart" should be "one." This girl should feel so lucky! To me, it's strange that people would think one grade apart is creepy...there are so many freshman/senior relationships at my school.

[SINDE]

Simple and precise. This piece is a winner.

[Autumn]

Ah, so you're a poem guy. I'm normally very harsh, but it seems like you have a certain style to you. One that's very straight foward and to the point. Poems are a lot harder to get on about grammar, but I can see that you write from your heart, and it is very sweet. Maybe a suggestion, instead of saying one grade, say one year? Just a thought, though. Very sweet.

[howlfjdks]

The desires of the heart can be very difficult to dissuade.

[(Loveless)]

such strong feelings and emotions this poem posses i think it really does hold strong disires and hope.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem of love and desire. I like how you wrote the poem. Describing situation and desire. The ending was very good. Thank you for the excellent poem. Sometime if you wait too long. Opportunity can fade away.
Coyote

[The Trapped Angel]

Their is nothing wrong with age, as long as you love that person, their is nothing wrong.

[Angela]

Soo precious. Any girl would love to be at the other end of this poem. If it's true, please go get her!

[brenda]

aaaaaw:)!!! yep that girl is lucky !!

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

Awww thats really cute. I love it. Good job!