A New Wrinkle in the Ancient Sea

A New Wrinkle in the Ancient Sea

 

Rhesus monkey maneuver

Through the chamber

Of a .38 Special-

Sauce on my hamburger intentions

Toward your pale insomniac soul

Searching for

A reason to fly-by

With vultures circling

Like a Christmas morning

Train set of thoughtlessness

And salty remorse  coleslawed into victims

Taken by

Confetti bomb force

And

Left to vogue in the scar-flavored ice

Of unholy remembrance

While the sunstrokes

Of dangerous

Colors

Lap

The meat from the jigsaw

Spine

Of a paperback

Crime novelty

Rabbit track                             paddy-whack           Jack the Ripper whip

Pinstripe strips strapped

Into starry constellations:

Brite Lite

Bottled messages

To

Eye

Massage

An inbound alien whoredom

And rogue

Pogo-Gods with leather loincloths

Smarmy silk tie games

And

Lion-skinned

Motorcycle

Helmets

To

Spare me

The small-talk and walk the chalk line

Around the death stain like a

Man (new verse)

Reviews

[roarke]

So.... I've see you've wire tapped my shrink sessions..... there's consequences to pay for that.... hahaahahaha

BLAMMO! by the dawns bursting air... as incongruous as these images and concepts may seem separately, they do congeal together in a very strange, Jungian kinda way.

Association, association,association.... did I mention association?

I think ya kinda homogenized it a bit.... link the "verses" closer and you just might scare grandma whose out pogo-ing with the loincloth gods....
Too many favorites to list,
are you entertaining questions from the readership?
"Inbound alien whoredom..." ?

Great stuff. Inspiring, enviable, Thorazine worthy.

[.]

your spoken word is awesome..incredibly tight, clever and poignant..your fast becoming a favourite of mine...

[OT]

oh wow!! very good!!! the descriptions are brilliant - I agree - word play galore - from harsh alliteration to sibilance - internal rhymes - to longer ones - oh so much going on in this piece!! the way you and your bro describe things is just beyond most people's wildest dreams haha - love -

"While the sunstrokes
Of dangerous
Colors
Lap
The meat from the jigsaw
Spine"

nice!!!!

[Kerry O'Connor]

This is an incredible piece of writing, leave alone the original uses for food (scar-flavoured ice-cream being my favourite), there's the word play, madly rhyming lines and killer last line. Blew my ship out the water.