Misdirected Focus (Poem)

Stepping in to the realm of chaos

Energy rampaging

Blinding my sight

Testing myself

All for what they caused

Enemies lighting the fires of fight

Once united

I fled from love

Her touch reminded me I was still weak

I killed

I cleaned

I stuffed the dove

Mounted it high to climb back to my feet

I made the choice to break free from these chains

Constricting and slowing my body's life force

I found my voice and I'm seeking change

Lifting this weight

Finally shifting my course

For those changing themselves for others

Shifting your focus

But not feeling right

Take back your pride and step out from cover

Lifting up hope and your wings to take flight

Author's Note

I let my obsession (of becoming a tough and bad as I could just for the moment I would meet up with some guys again) ruin everything in my life... I accomplished what I sought out and I have the scars and people that shared some of those crazy memories with me to prove it... But was it worth it? No. I lost focus of my family. My new born daughter. Never let what someone else does or says affect you and just be you no matter what. Never fear.

Reviews

[Mia]

“I fled from love
Her touch reminded me I was still weak”
That line broke my heart, literally made me cry. It’s so powerful and it will stay with me for a while, I’m not sure why. I love that you have a fighting spirit and it comes through in your writing. You could complain about life and all you’ve been through and leave it at that, god knows no one could say you don’t have the right. And yet that’s not where you leave it, you always stop falling and start climbing up again (if you will). I admire that about you and your writing. I wish you well in everything you do because you learn from your mistakes and that is such a gift!
Sorry I’m babbling...this one got to me!

[Damien Davison]

Wow, thank you so much... Heh, that makes me feel really good! One just has to realize the potential in themselves and all the opportunities in life.

[Silhouette]

wow ther's a lot of emotions in this poem. I really liked the lines

Once united
I fled from love
Her touch reminded me I was still weak

I killed
I cleaned
I stuffed the dove
Mounted it high to climb back to my feet

The whole thing was good but those lines were my favorite. Nicely done :)

[Damien Davison]

Thank you for the review!

[Silhouette]

My pleasure :)

[beautiful dreamer]

i like this poem alot :) sometimes you just need to get out of the past and into the future. what a great write :)

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much, sometimes you need to get out of both and just be.

[kublakhan27]

This has a bit of a Fantasy feel to it, though I can see it was anything but that for you...but I can relate to a lot of these sentiments and I can say (at least for me) that making the change is a lot harder than it should be, so I'm glad to see this piece end on a positive note...it's cool how you personify love here too...it's hard to do that and sound unique but you've pulled it off nicely^^

[Damien Davison]

Why thank you, I make quite a few love poems, not many are on this sight, and I know exactly what you mean. It's hard to make it not sound cliche, luckily for me I was in the zone haha. Thank you for the review!

[kublakhan27]

haha No problem :)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Lucky for us, we're all human and we're allowed to make mistakes. You realized you've done something wrong you have the rest of your lifetime to make up for your mistake. An honest, relateable write for all - with a message we should all keep in the back of our minds. Nicely done.

[Damien Davison]

Thank you very much, no sense in dwelling on s**t you've done, everything needs to be let go, with lessons learned of course, and just be... Just be. Thank you!

[Felecia]

Alright to this is the first time I've read your any of your writing since you've requested to be friends (obviously I accepted...since i'm here....reviewing this)
And i just have to say that this....IS AMAZING. Wow sorry....did't mean to shout there.

I killed
I cleaned
I stuffed the dove
Mounted it high to climb back to my feet


I made the choice to break free from these chains
Constricting and slowing my body's life force


These lines were the ones that completely hit home for me. I've been doing my best to break free of some things...but trying to do what you've done and wrote about in this poem, is harder than I thought it would be. I'm not sure why it's so hard, since I know it's best for me to break ties with things that are only causing me and others pain, but it is hard. Anyway, I'm sure I'll be able to.
Enough about me, this is about you ahaha and your poem.
This poem is a really unique all it's own and I've never read anything like it (I'm sure that's what all us writers wish) and it's wonderful, raw and true and also just...wow.
First poem I've read by you so far and I know in the future i'm going to like whatever it is your writer, because you're clearly very talent and just amazing at writing.
Thank for sharing!

-Felecia

[Damien Davison]

Wow thank you for the review! The poems not just for me ha or else I wouldn't have shared it. I hoped some would relate, if not many! Thank you again!

[Felecia]

Fair enough ahaha. You're welcome! :)

[†Tracey†]

A road traveled that we can all relate too.. I'm happy for you that you've found your peace and clarity and are on your way to healing.. if your not already there :) xo

[Damien Davison]

Teetering lol, more on the greener side of fence though! Thank you for reviewing!

[†Tracey†]

Anytime, I enjoy your work..xo

[Sarah Ramsbottom]

this is beautiful. I think we all try to fit someone elses idea of perfect, never allow a person to suck the you from you. to thy self always be true! Amazing poem!

[Damien Davison]

I appreciate it, thank you!

[Ed Fagan]

Don't some of us spend many ruined moments destroying everything brilliant for the satisfaction of the unimportant? Good write.

[Damien Davison]

Indeed... Thank you!

[DIVYA]

A beautiful coincidence but I came across this poem just as I decided to do what you advised...staying true to myself and being what I am. Thank you for the very liberating words and sharing the enlightening work. Ready to fly now, DN :)

[Damien Davison]

That's all we can do to begin to find happiness is be happy with who we are... Thanks for the review!