Talks of Being Free

Sometimes when you're free, you miss captivity.

You miss the love, the push, the shove.

You wish that you were'nt free.

 

You wish back all your memories.

You miss the wind, you miss the trees.

You miss the talks of being free.

You wish back the captivity.

 

You wished you'd stayed for her sweet heart.

You wish the scary thoughts would part.

You wish your pawm was back at start.

You miss the love of precious hearts.

 

Being free within captivity, is all your little heart will be.

Captured in an aweful dream.

Wishing back that you were free.

Author's Note

Please leave comments! I love constructive criticism!

Reviews

[Nightfall]

you left no choice to do criticism, i'd read it out twice a time to find out your stkes, but ahahhhh, how can i win by a pretty girl...your poetry is so powerful, i think your words are as well...you did honor me to share & lost me in the world of ''Being ~ free"...

when i was just reading it, thereby to know your depth, i found you've missed someone...may i ask from where you'd got this pretty cool idea for poem...?????/

[Mercedes Diamond]

Thanks so much! It came from when i was younger and i ran away from home. The suffocation of it all made me crave freedom. But once i got what i always desired, i wished i could take it away.

[Nightfall]

"when i was younger"...!your this statement shows i think you're of 90's...oppssss, i think...70's....may be it could 50's...but your walla pic. showed you're 20........

anyway, it' was a mistake to know ,
i liked your eys-bror,
apart from this these ain't seeing,
i wanna say hellow....

you'e name is "Mercedes",
what's a meaning of it may i ask it may charming frnd....?
your wallpic. is nice, i think you are a student not a child....

you wanted to get freedom,
omg...it's a unique decision,
but you got it instead of suffocation,
i did love your anspiration....
i wish, yu're now in good condition,
not so old, but very bold,
because, i loved too your writings inspiration......

Is that really you on wallpic...??????
omg...you're really fair, hey...wait...i'm not your Nick...:)
i'm legit, so shouldn't ya me pick...!!

you'r wriitng is nice i think,
that's why you're here on this site,
hope i'd read your more shine,
because, you wanna much write...write & write...

[Mercedes Diamond]

I have to say, your words have left me without any of my own.

[Seraph]

This poem is really good, it makes me wish that i wasn't free on some terms

[Mercedes Diamond]

Thanks so much! That's exactly what i was trying to portray.

[Seraph]

well you portrayed it quite well, good job