I'm Still Waiting

It was cold, but the sun made everything colder.

I’ve lived a fast life, now, with some regrets

Floating out, but unignorably there.

I had something to say when we last met,

Fading out with the sun down the path,

Where little flickering leaves caught the last of it.

Whatever it was I’d wanted to say,

Had to wait while winter wind swept away,

Heat from between our black winter coats.

Did it dissolve, what I had to say?

Was something falling out or in or away?

Or cooling, so the grass could stand still with the stones?

Or had the birds said all there was to say?

No. 

There must have been something that day.

I remember, between the college and woods.

There was something silently calling,

And a clear sense of “ought,” and “can,” and “should”

But the sun set beautifully 

While the leaves were falling.

And we were trespassing and trading eyes and smiles, 

(yours closing and fading),

Well, but, I had something to say.

Author's Note

I've been away for a Long time

Reviews

[JScottM]

It shocks me how this relates to me. I know the feeling and pull of something wanting you to react. If you do it then there will be a reaction. If you don't there will be a reaction. Something happens either way. What we should do is irrelevant sometimes. What we want, now and in the future, is what we should strive for. This is an amazing piece Epip. Im glad i read it.

[Epipsychologist]

Thanks JScott,

Part of what I like about this one is that I wrote it after the push and the pull and the feelings had settled. I guess this day I had in mind was irrelevant, in a way, but it's still resonating a little bit for me. I'm glad you read it and liked it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

after winter, what was it i wanted to say?

i think this poem can teach us all something...

say it now....express how we feel about those closest to us...because they words may blow away like leaves in a storm...and be covered up by a winter snow...
when the thaw comes..those words may not be recognizable anymore.

[Epipsychologist]

First of all you're one of my favorits on here,
Just when I review slowly it doesn't mean I don't read people...
Sometime I read them a 10 times before I review.

This write spoke to me, Epipsychologist,
To begin, I am related to you "opening quote" ;
" It was cold, but the sun made everything colder. "
I loved that line, for the sun not always shines warmly
Especially not when the mood is not in the way it should be.

Secondly,
As soon as the day to night can get, like the tides,
I see your love life going under ... as the quick sun
On a bloomy day, in your first words
Like a blanket of you is deducted while
you just feel as comfortable and warm ...
Thus, the sun also included involved,
as it is colder in the night, it get's colder
and colder...

That you call the birds board as speaking
Is remarkable and makes you a natural listener,
In full force ... they speak indeed,
When many people think they just tweeting...

This autumn ambience and feeling,
While the leaves fall is remarkeble again,
You're very seasonal... and that speaks to me.

When the connection is lost ~
And dwelled into other dimensions,
Your words as you speak, can only whisper
the soul to reach ~

Just a sensational write my friend,
I fully enjoyed the power of your brain behind it.
And the visualisations, and imagery.
It is pity I have so less time, to be fully around,
But let me say, I will never forget such a writer as you...
And I shall come back.

- Elisa

[Epipsychologist]

Thanks Elisa. This response is basically a poem itself, a poem I enjoyed. And it's great to know you like my work. I'll try to keep busy.

-Epi

You're welcome...

[Marie]

I think you said what you had to say...or birds and sun and leaves said it for you.


I know you've been away, but I've been checking every day to see if you've posted anything. I'm glad to see your work again.

[Epipsychologist]

Thanks Marie. I feel bad for having gone AWOL, I've just been falling behind in class a little. It's nice to know my WC friends are looking out though. I'll try to post more soon, and get back to reviewing.

[Marie]

I was afraid you weren't well.

[Epipsychologist]

Oh. Actually I finally got all the testing and things done and it turns out i just have weird optic nerves, but nothing serious.

Thanks for the concern.

[Marie]

I'm very glad.

[Pax]

oh your eyes are ok... that's good... and its great hearing from you again my friend...

[Epipsychologist]

Thanks Pax. It's good to be back.