Heavy Love

I am often wrong when...

I feel strong

feeble, weak

creeping along

Love is a balloon

chained to your leg

till someone drops it

a cement filled keg

It pulls you down

into the deep

breath is gone

permanent sleep

You reach the point

of no return

you've broken hearts

for this you'll burn...

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

"Love is a balloon
chained to your leg
till someone drops it
a cement filled keg"

I think these lines are absolutely stellar and really stand out from the rest of the poem. The poem in its entirety, however, is really superb. I know full well how love can lift you on high, making you feel as if you're walking on air. Then, when it bursts, it weighs you down with such a mixed bag of emotions. While I personally haven’t responded to someone breaking my heart by turning around and deliberately hurting someone else, I know that many do.

I do like the fact, however, that you are aware that you have hurt others. Hopefully, one day, this cognizance will turn “heavy love” to one of “heavenly love.”

Well done!

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[MysticalGlow]

Really like the lines ... Love is a balloon/chained to your leg/till someone drops it... Well Done!!