The doll

She sits alone with watery eyes
with nothing to hold but a doll dressed as a bride
a gift from her mommy, before she passed away
a gift worth more then money, atleast to her anyway
she cradles it in her arms, and rocks it back and forth
As she watches her mommy being lowered into the earth
mommy why'd you have to die? She asks, stifling a cry
but to this question she gets no reply
she traces a heart atop her mommies grave
and leaves the doll behind, as she sadly walks away

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

While reading this it hit me that we cherish and hold dolls so much that we fill them with so much emotion that they really do carry a part of energetic selves. It is sad...feeling her leave that part of her behind. Like a void that will never be filled. I also liked the touch with the heart being etched on the grave. xo

[MikeV]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed :)

[Sami Khalil]

A sad and beautiful poem at the same time...You have done a great job...:)

[MikeV]

Thank you! :)

[MikeV]

Thank you! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[SyberRose]

A sad one ...but nicely done with a lot emotion and imagery...enjoyed...Rose:)

[MikeV]

Thank you Rose! I'm glad you enjoyed :)

[Plume de flamme]

Oh mike. This is a tough one. A parent who must leave their child. Arghhh.

[MikeV]

I'm sorry, i tried thinking of a happy ending but the vision in my head was full of sadness
thank you for reading, i truly appreciate it :)

[Plume de flamme]

No, you chose the true ending; that is most important. It was a great write.

[MikeV]

Thank you :)

[Frieda P]

This one's a tearjerker Mike, different from what I've read from you, a heartwrenching read, yet very lovely and affecting, kudos.

[MikeV]

Thank you! I tried something different
I'm so glad you noticed!

[Frieda P]

I like this softer side of you :-) My pleasure.

[MikeV]

:) Aww thank you

[Frieda P]

Welcome, you're on a roll, pen on. ;-)

[Dye]

Aside from typographical errors, I really like this. You capture a story and evoke an emotion within a small amount of space. It pulls on the heartstrings.

[MikeV]

Thank you! I tried so hard to paint the picture i had in my head :)