I'd rather die

I've had some brutal writers block this is all i could come up with

You haunted my dreams
and brought my soul to life
you washed away every nightmare
like an angel in the night

Then you told me, we could no longer be
i.couldn't say anything back
i ran my hands through your hair
but you brushed them away with a smack

tears flowed freely
you looked at me in disgust
i looked back in despair
But that's when i knew, there was no longer an us

i asked if you wanted to watch tv
You laughed in my face
i told you i still cared
Though i knew you didn't feel the same way

i got angry
and started to shout
life became a blur
i hardly remember it now

i said, I'm sorry
but it was too late
you had gotten in your car
and were driving away

dust was all i could see
as i chased you, for half a block
my heart filled with sadness and fear
Because. i knew, you'd never stop

my nose was stuffy
as i cried into the air
"I'd rather of died thinking you loved me
then live a life, knowing you don't care"

Reviews

[L.Edward]

Your stuff seems all the more powerful to me for its lack of pretensiousness. Breaking up is a cold hard pain in your gut. Nothing flowery about it. Its hurts like a mule kick. And you nailed that feeling. But I can feel the realease at the end, because you have aknowledged that pain in the most direct way. Confronted it. Not coated it in cotton candy adjectives, which I really appreciate.

[MikeV]

Thank you very much my friend! :) i appreciate it

[mark]

very touching and sad write.
very good story. is this about you or just a random story?
its funny how people actually feel the emotions while writing about it.
i enjoyed reading this man keep it up.

[MikeV]

Actually a mix, i remember old heartbreaks, i think what would a new heartbreak feel like
then i put it into story form. But not all things written are real. To make a great write, i believe things must be exagerated

[mark]

oh yeah fair enough...well its a good write man

[MikeV]

Thank you very much : )

[Rob Santana]

S**t, damn good for writers block.

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)

[Dreamer]

This was a touching poem, I enjoyed reading it very much!
Nicely penned.

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)

[Dreamer]

You're more than welcome!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very deep and as rose said powerfull.
I felt your emotions being put into this peace was very heartfelt.
Your rhyming was once again awesome.
In always like your stuff great poem Mike :)

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your welcome :)

[SyberRose]

A powerful emotive read Mike...nicely penned as always...I think everyone can relate to
this feeling...Rose

[MikeV]

Thank you so much Rose! :) its nice seein you peekin in

[SyberRose]

im a voyeur ha

[Skyangel_91]

I thought that it was very powerful. To me there's no other way to describe it, but all I can say is absolutely wonderful. I mean by reading this you can definitely feel the emotion throughout the whole poem. I just absolutely loved it.

[MikeV]

Thank you very much! :) I've been in a writers block rut for a while
so your comment was very uplifting :)

[Skyangel_91]

No problem. I've been trying to get my work out there because I'm always negative about it, but I know the feeling of having writer's block. It can be a pain.