Along the Spanish Shore

Along the Spanish shore,

where breeze and ocean dance the Flamenco

in a glittering mix of moonlight and azure shine,

she held his hand as if he owned the world

 

Two were one beneath the trembling sky,

fingers intertwined, a latticework

of flesh and unanswered questions,

ushered on by string filled melodies

whispering of secrets and serenades

 

a boy, salt-stained skin and caramel eyes

a girl, awkward limbs and pouty lips

 

children playing dress-up in clothes

the color of the sun and the sea,

learning that love is the dance of gypsies,

 

all rhythmic movements , thrusting hips

delicate arms, closeness unavoidable

 

beneath a Hunter’s Moon,

one tender kiss, impulsive and fevered ,

with nothing but eternity on their minds,

youth celebrates in the fanning of skirts,

the stomping of feet and the power of the tocaores. 

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is why my friend's list is so small and my subscriptions are so few; so I don't miss beautiful gems like this by gifted poets like you.

WONDERFUL!

[MattWheatus]

A moment of love and innocent; written so beautifully it made me feel warm. Excellent piece! the way you have paired your descriptions added to the sense of combination of the young couple (moonlight and azure and others). This line was just magic: "she held his hand as if he owned the world".

[Clockwork]

Through your verses you have successfully captured the movements of an elemental force, human desire, and human culture. Your words have an ease to them, a deep well which speaks to the soul. Your imagery is striking, and the refrains in this piece help to validate them, fitting perfectly with the rest of the piece. I think it was a good choice to make refrains couplets. This is truly a masterful piece of art.

[Poetic Beauty]

I don't know if I have read a poem that flows like this before. This is a flowing poem. I could picture the teenagers having their first kiss. This poem is stunning and absolutely breath taking. The only change I would make is add a two line stanza between your first and second stanza. The wording is fantastic.

[Art]

Nice... I like how you expressed two views of this dance and mucis from the actual dancers to the child within imaginagion a very nice poetic view of music, flamenco and love...

enjoyed...

[Pax Analog]

Utterly charming, vivid, luminous.

"in a glittering mix of moonlight and azure shine,/she held his hand as if he owned the world" particularly lingers long in my mind.

Yet it seamlessly flows to more line gems: "Two were one beneath the trembling sky,/fingers intertwined, a latticework/of flesh and unanswered questions."

This entire mood of pristine love warms the soul.

[Ferg]

excellent writing! i like the structure and how you intertwine various themes into one seamless whole. very effective and evocative piece......

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

wow. This is a work of art. Truly Beautiful.


Along the Spanish shore,

where breeze and ocean dance the Flamenco

I loved those lines.