We were sitting outside at the schools’ football field, parents,
aunts, uncles, children and grandparents lined the bleachers. Even though we
were outside, in the warm sunlight and we could hear the bustling of cars, the
chatter of excitement was very loud. It wasn’t just the students that were excited,
it was their family members too. The uproar was a little overwhelming. All the
student slowly took their seats on the folded chairs in their caps and gowns
waiting for the principal to start. As he started to speak, I felt myself
slowly start to zone out, thinking about the past three years and how the
school community has been shaped with tragedy.
Throughout the last three years, the school lost three students,
with at least one death affecting everyone. One student went each year into the
heavens, and the deaths seemed connected somehow, but also seemed like random
freak accidents. One of those students I knew of was named Maleko.
Before he died, Maleko explained that his name was Hawaiian and
that it meant ‘defender of the sea’. He somehow knew who I was and about my
family, my real family as he pointed out, but he mysteriously died
before we could have that conversation. The newspapers reported a fatal car
crash, of him and his parents all dying upon impact.
However as I recall every encounter before that, I had always had
a serious case of déjà vu; and it wouldn’t be until my summer vacation until I
found out why. We were meant to be connected, and no one was any the wiser for
it.
Well, you did ask, so you have only yourself to blame. But…it’s a good first try, and what I have to say has nothing to do with how well you write (which is better than most hopeful writers) your talent, or even the story. It’s related to what I call, The Great Misunderstanding, which, boiled down, is this: For more than a decade, in school, we honed our writing skills via an endless succession of reports and essays, and, an occasional story.
Guess what that made us good at writing. Hint: not fiction. 😋
The thing we all forget is that the goal of a good report is informing the reader clearly, concisely, and, dispassionately.
Why dispassionately? Because in all the world only you know how you want the piece to be read. Only you know the emotion to place into the reading. Only you can hear your voice as you read; Only you know your intent for how the words are to be taken. And that’s a major problem, because our goal, as E. L. Doctorow put it: “Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader. Not the fact that it’s raining, but the feeling of being rained upon.” And how much time did your teachers devote to how to do that? Zero, right?
See the problem? We can’t tell the reader a story as we would in person because none of our performance makes it to the page—and verbal storytelling is performance oriented. HOW you tell the story matters as much as what you say.
We can’t explain the progression of events, as we would in a report, because that won't stimulate reader’s emotions. So what do we do? We use the tricks the pros take for granted: the emotion-based and character-centric skills of the profession we call, Fiction-Writing—which would be a LOT easier to do had we not, pretty universally, forgotten that professional skills and knowledge are acquired IN ADDITION to the general skills traditionally called, The Three R’s: Reading, wRiting, and aRithmatic.
No one told us, for example, that on entering any scene, we need to orient the reader as to where we are, what’s going on, and whose skin we wear (and do it without the reader noticing it happening). So, we don’t. No one tells us that because a scene on the page is a unit of tension, but if we continue to keep the tension rising we'll cross over into melodrama, and so, before that happens the scene must end—usually in disaster for the protagonist.
For more on why, this article, Batman is my Role Model, might help:
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/2011/06/27/the-grumpy-writing-coach-6/
(Because this site doesn’t handle links properly, you need to copy/paste the address to the URL box at the top of an internet page and hit Return.)
Look at the opining section of this story, not as the all knowing author, or the storyteller playing all roles. Instead, look at it as a reader in the bookstore, who arrives with mild curiosity that fades quickly, unless we replace it with active interest:
• I thought I had everything.
So…someone we know nothing about just told us they were wrong about something unknown. Where are we in time and space? Unknown. What’s going on in the scene? Nothing because the story has yet to begin. And in fact, it never does. At the end of what’s presented we’ve been told lots of things that are irrelevant to the opening scene, in an essay that might be titled, “My life before the story began.” But… Does a reader care what the protagonist’s mother weighed before the story began? As much as you’re dying to know what my mother weighed when I was a kid. Do they care how well off the protagonist was, years before the events that opens the first scene take place?
Bottom line: Unlike nonfiction, fiction happens in real-time, and places the reader into the scene, as-the-protagonist.
A point we universally forget is that as we read, we learn what happens BEFORE the protagonist does. So we react before they do, and decide what the best response is before they do.
So, do we want the reader to react as they normally would, or as the protagonist will? The answer is obvious, but the how isn’t: We calibrate the reader’s perception of the situation to that of the protagonist. If we make the reader know what has the protagonist’s attention in the moment they call “now;” if we make the reader know the protagonist’s immediate objective, desires, and needs; if we make the reader know their view of the needs/desires/intent of the others in the scene—including their misconceptions on that—several things will happen:
1. We know everything but what will happen in response to what's said/done. That makes the future uncertain, to-the-reader. And a worried reader is a happy reader.
2. Instead of every reader having their own personal view of what to do, we all use the protagonost’s.
3. The reader begins to feel as if they’re living the events, not just learning what happened.
4. The reader begins to CARE. And unless that happens, they stop reading, quickly. As Sol Stein put it: “A novel is like a car—it won’t go anywhere until you turn on the engine. The “engine” of both fiction and nonfiction is the point at which the reader makes the decision not to put the book down. The engine should start in the first three pages, the closer to the top of page one the better.”
So…while this was nowhere near what you were hoping to hear, doesn’t it make sense? A lot of the tricks of fiction-writing are like that, of the kind that make you say, “But that’s so…how did I miss something so obvious?”
And if that was your reaction, I have good news: An awful lot of the tricks-of-the-trade are just like that: Logical, sensible, and obvious when pointed out. Internalizing them, and making them as intuitive to use as the nonfiction skills of our schooldays, and your working days, is a bit more difficult, because convincing your current writing-reflexes to let go of the controls and let you write in a way that feels “wrong,” is hard.
But when you do internalize and integrate it, you’ll find that the act of writing becomes a lot more fun, as the protagonist becomes your co-writer, whispering suggestions and warnings in your ear as you write. Then, your protagonist will place hands on hips, cross their arms, and say, “Do what? Seriously? You expect me to do that? Hell no. Not me, and not in this situation. What I’ll do is…” Till that happens, your characters aren’t real to you or the reader.
So, how to you get there? My personal suggestion is to devour a few books on the subject of fiction-writing. For you it's ideal. You work when you have time. No pressure. And no tests. And recently, the single best book I’ve found on the basics of creating scenes that will sing to the reader is out of copyright, and available for free download on some archive sites The address of one is just below this paragraph.
So grab a copy and dig in. For what it may be worth, the articles in my WordPress writing blog are mostly based on that book. It’s an older book, and he talks about your typewriter, assumes all men smoke and women are homemakers—which was true when he wrote the book. And, his section on research can be stated as, “Use Google, a lot.” But that aside, the book has over 200 5-star reviews on Amazon, and is by far, the best I’ve found on pulling back the curtain on the why’s and how’s of the profession.
So was this what you were hoping to hear? Of course not. Who would? But it is what you need to know. And your wordsmith skills are up to the task, so I thought you’d want to know.
So, hang in there, and keep on writing.
Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
Well, you did ask, so you have only yourself to blame. But…it’s a good first try, and what I have to say has nothing to do with how well you write (which is better than most hopeful writers) your talent, or even the story. It’s related to what I call, The Great Misunderstanding, which, boiled down, is this: For more than a decade, in school, we honed our writing skills via an endless succession of reports and essays, and, an occasional story.
Guess what that made us good at writing. Hint: not fiction. 😋
The thing we all forget is that the goal of a good report is informing the reader clearly, concisely, and, dispassionately.
Why dispassionately? Because in all the world only you know how you want the piece to be read. Only you know the emotion to place into the reading. Only you can hear your voice as you read; Only you know your intent for how the words are to be taken. And that’s a major problem, because our goal, as E. L. Doctorow put it: “Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader. Not the fact that it’s raining, but the feeling of being rained upon.” And how much time did your teachers devote to how to do that? Zero, right?
See the problem? We can’t tell the reader a story as we would in person because none of our performance makes it to the page—and verbal storytelling is performance oriented. HOW you tell the story matters as much as what you say.
We can’t explain the progression of events, as we would in a report, because that won't stimulate reader’s emotions. So what do we do? We use the tricks the pros take for granted: the emotion-based and character-centric skills of the profession we call, Fiction-Writing—which would be a LOT easier to do had we not, pretty universally, forgotten that professional skills and knowledge are acquired IN ADDITION to the general skills traditionally called, The Three R’s: Reading, wRiting, and aRithmatic.
No one told us, for example, that on entering any scene, we need to orient the reader as to where we are, what’s going on, and whose skin we wear (and do it without the reader noticing it happening). So, we don’t. No one tells us that because a scene on the page is a unit of tension, but if we continue to keep the tension rising we'll cross over into melodrama, and so, before that happens the scene must end—usually in disaster for the protagonist.
For more on why, this article, Batman is my Role Model, might help:
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/2011/06/27/the-grumpy-writing-coach-6/
(Because this site doesn’t handle links properly, you need to copy/paste the address to the URL box at the top of an internet page and hit Return.)
Look at the opining section of this story, not as the all knowing author, or the storyteller playing all roles. Instead, look at it as a reader in the bookstore, who arrives with mild curiosity that fades quickly, unless we replace it with active interest:
• I thought I had everything.
So…someone we know nothing about just told us they were wrong about something unknown. Where are we in time and space? Unknown. What’s going on in the scene? Nothing because the story has yet to begin. And in fact, it never does. At the end of what’s presented we’ve been told lots of things that are irrelevant to the opening scene, in an essay that might be titled, “My life before the story began.” But… Does a reader care what the protagonist’s mother weighed before the story began? As much as you’re dying to know what my mother weighed when I was a kid. Do they care how well off the protagonist was, years before the events that opens the first scene take place?
Bottom line: Unlike nonfiction, fiction happens in real-time, and places the reader into the scene, as-the-protagonist.
A point we universally forget is that as we read, we learn what happens BEFORE the protagonist does. So we react before they do, and decide what the best response is before they do.
So, do we want the reader to react as they normally would, or as the protagonist will? The answer is obvious, but the how isn’t: We calibrate the reader’s perception of the situation to that of the protagonist. If we make the reader know what has the protagonist’s attention in the moment they call “now;” if we make the reader know the protagonist’s immediate objective, desires, and needs; if we make the reader know their view of the needs/desires/intent of the others in the scene—including their misconceptions on that—several things will happen:
1. We know everything but what will happen in response to what's said/done. That makes the future uncertain, to-the-reader. And a worried reader is a happy reader.
2. Instead of every reader having their own personal view of what to do, we all use the protagonost’s.
3. The reader begins to feel as if they’re living the events, not just learning what happened.
4. The reader begins to CARE. And unless that happens, they stop reading, quickly. As Sol Stein put it: “A novel is like a car—it won’t go anywhere until you turn on the engine. The “engine” of both fiction and nonfiction is the point at which the reader makes the decision not to put the book down. The engine should start in the first three pages, the closer to the top of page one the better.”
So…while this was nowhere near what you were hoping to hear, doesn’t it make sense? A lot of the tricks of fiction-writing are like that, of the kind that make you say, “But that’s so…how did I miss something so obvious?”
And if that was your reaction, I have good news: An awful lot of the tricks-of-the-trade are just like that: Logical, sensible, and obvious when pointed out. Internalizing them, and making them as intuitive to use as the nonfiction skills of our schooldays, and your working days, is a bit more difficult, because convincing your current writing-reflexes to let go of the controls and let you write in a way that feels “wrong,” is hard.
But when you do internalize and integrate it, you’ll find that the act of writing becomes a lot more fun, as the protagonist becomes your co-writer, whispering suggestions and warnings in your ear as you write. Then, your protagonist will place hands on hips, cross their arms, and say, “Do what? Seriously? You expect me to do that? Hell no. Not me, and not in this situation. What I’ll do is…” Till that happens, your characters aren’t real to you or the reader.
So, how to you get there? My personal suggestion is to devour a few books on the subject of fiction-writing. For you it's ideal. You work when you have time. No pressure. And no tests. And recently, the single best book I’ve found on the basics of creating scenes that will sing to the reader is out of copyright, and available for free download on some archive sites The address of one is just below this paragraph.
So grab a copy and dig in. For what it may be worth, the articles in my WordPress writing blog are mostly based on that book. It’s an older book, and he talks about your typewriter, assumes all men smoke and women are homemakers—which was true when he wrote the book. And, his section on research can be stated as, “Use Google, a lot.” But that aside, the book has over 200 5-star reviews on Amazon, and is by far, the best I’ve found on pulling back the curtain on the why’s and how’s of the profession.
So was this what you were hoping to hear? Of course not. Who would? But it is what you need to know. And your wordsmith skills are up to the task, so I thought you’d want to know.
So, hang in there, and keep on writing.
Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
I am a mother to three beautiful girls, all under the age of 12. I work from home as a medical scribe, and often use writing to cope with life's ups and downs. I moved to Nebraska in 2019 from New Ham.. more..