Every Rose has its Thorns

My English assignment was to write about nature. This is what I came up with.

A beautiful red rose

Fragile and frail

Trying to be perfect

Always told she'll fail

The most beautiful red rose

Living among tulips

They don't understand pain

The sun removes hardships

Planted in the shade

She is so alone

A garden of misery

Is where she was grown

As the years go on

As she's getting older

The nights are getting longer

Winter's getting colder

No longer innocent

She's fading to grey

A wilting rose

She's slipping away

Her crimson colour changes

While her petals fall

Will anyone notice she's gone

Would they care at all

Once a perfect flower

Now a memory

No longer trapped

Now her soul is free

Reviews

[Hessy]

GOOD WORK !........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

[Bran the Broken]

well-flowing, good detail with being too stuffy and showy, very real and believable tension and sorrow reverberating strongly but not exagerratedly....good stuff.

[A.r. Bazian]

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greatly written!
very good technique!
and the imagery is so vivid and capturing!

i liked this so much... maybe aside to the actual talent of the writer... maybe becoz i can alternately relate to it!
i like it... its intense and heartfelt!

keep up he good word!

[CarrieLynn {Chameleon A..]

I really, really liked this..great write! :)

[Ju Ju]

Wow I like how you made the rose have human emotions...you did it beautifully
I like how it is very honest
and true
very good

[Baby Boy]

Wow! This is really interesting and if I'm right, I feel that rose is compared to a person or maybe even you! I could be wrong so don't hold that against me! LOL! I really like this one and the rhyming is perfect but most of all I felt it! I could feel the rose dying as time went on! The ending was excellent and I'm glad that rose was set free! :) Great write sweetie! I enjoyed! :) One luv gurl!


-JC-