The Death of the Cowboy

And as I stop to come down,
I start to wonder why,
Cowboys ride off in the sunset,
And never the sunrise;

For when my body's cold and sound,
And the Cowboy's left this town,
And dirt will cover like a net,
Will his yielding pose no threat?

-So to everyone I've met,
When its time for me to die,
Don't you waste me in the ground,
Bury me in the clear, blue sky.

Author's Note

I really feel as though this is unfinished, not that it should be longer, but that it can stand to be re-worded for better effect.

Reviews

[Magdelena]

Heck, it's perfect the way it is. It says it all in such a simple yet perfect way.. I loved the imagery in this. The way it simply flowed off the page and in my minds eye I felt your words seep deep inside.

The ending? WOW! Now that is an ending......

Way to go guy!

Mags xx

[trainwreck]

This really good. I love the last line. It speaks volumes in the short space you used.

[William Maisonave]

I'm smiling...this is a great piece. I agree it shouldnt necessarily be longer. being concise is an art in and of itself;say the most you can with as few words possible. I have alot of peices that are short and powerful.

[paul]

fantastic flow
inquisitive content
remarkable ending

[wizzawiz]

I love the optimism in this. What an amazing thought - riding off into the sunrise and the clear blue sky as a new beginning of whatever comes next - beautiful! :-)

[aBillings]

Oh my goodness, I simply LOVE this poem. I love the last line... Bury me in the clear, blue sky. Epic. (:

[Narnie]

I think the last two lines are brilliance. I think cut everything out of the middle and see if you feel more comfortable with it, then let it grow again if you want. The last two lines are unique and brilliant - don't lose them. :)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Excellent flow and rhythmn to this one..I enjoyed the topic, also..Your presence at my work brought a ray of sunlight to my cold winter morn..Sunflower

[deeps]

I like this, It flows nicely and has an amazing rhyme scheme.
If you add more I will reread it.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

I like it like this to be honest. It's short, sweet yet holds such fantastic emotion and meaning. I really like the last 2 lines.

[Brianna Brie]

Well, it amazes me how your writes are so short, yet jammed packed full of interesting thoughts. I like the bit about the sunset and sunrise, as well as, the ending.