She's gone, they say..

She's gone, they say..

A Poem by Moniba

Dull leaves, wilted flowers..
Dry grass, bent trees..
Dirty baskets, unkempt shrubs..
Caked shovels, arid soil..

She's gone, she died.
There's no one to care..
The flowers miss her,
The winds call to her..

The skies are sad, 
The ocean weeps..
She's gone they say,
She's lost to the world.

© 2013 Moniba


Author's Note

Moniba
This really has no central idea... Written to write, without inspiration.

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i don't think that there is no central idea in it...i do means a lot...i would gladly like to appreciate this piece of writing and i found this the best of your work what have read till now..i sorely like the diction herre and the very first stanza creates so vivid imagery in our mind ...sinking us to the environment of despair and sadness...also what i like is the importance you have conveyed through these verses to that person which is truly prophetic...great job!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thank you Atiba!



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beauty in unknown ..yet I think if you read this again.... you will see what your mind wants you to see .....

Posted 9 Years Ago


It seems the universe is one less star without her. I really like this sentimental piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thank you. Hmm that's the idea here.
There has to be something to it.
hmmmm.... Something unknown & hidden.

Posted 9 Years Ago


what an imagination and just written to write
very lovely images so vivid
thank you for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


Moniba

9 Years Ago

Oh, thank you! :)
i don't think that there is no central idea in it...i do means a lot...i would gladly like to appreciate this piece of writing and i found this the best of your work what have read till now..i sorely like the diction herre and the very first stanza creates so vivid imagery in our mind ...sinking us to the environment of despair and sadness...also what i like is the importance you have conveyed through these verses to that person which is truly prophetic...great job!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thank you Atiba!
I am surprised to find myself, finding your poems to sound beautiful and free, all the while.... "listening" to how the words that you use are to describe how desolate and chaotic these emotions are. We all borrow against our pasts and memories that make us who we are, whether we like it or not, but to be able to put into poem for OTHERS to understand..... THAT is the great debate one would seek to soak up in even the Roman times. Scripture, legends, fairy tales "which have their OWN dark histories", and poem are wonderful ways to experience inclusion and not go it alone anymore!! This is my fourth poem of yours that I read, and they were all enjoyed. Most, if not all, were similar in the "downward spiral" feeling, but I liked them...... xoxo -Mark

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thank you... I'm honored really, and will try not to disappoint you in the future either. And yeah.... read more
but there is a central idea, and you really create a picture for me.

i see a house and a yard of someone much older. this person has passed away...and now it is reflected in the uncared for, unkempt yard...overgrown, left alone.

and the person looking at this reflects on that person...maybe wondering about her or him.

wondering what the person was really like, why didn't i get to know him or her ...more than i did..

this is food for a lot of thought, actually..

sometimes these poems that just blurt out are the best.

i like your voice.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thank you! And yes, I agree. Sometimes these randomly written pieces turn out best.
I liked th.. read more
Marvelous imagination!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Moniba

9 Years Ago

Thankyou sir.
zainul

9 Years Ago

You are most welcome.
a sad piece!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Moniba

9 Years Ago

Hmm, I write sad poems for some reason.
Muhammad Qasim

9 Years Ago

but even if they are sad...they are goos and that is what matters

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Moniba
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Karachi, Sindh, Pakistan



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