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A Poem by Monners
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wrote this in 2002, so sorry if its not that polished. can't really edit this cause i dont really like writing on the topic unless it comes up in life in a certain way...anyway...yeah.

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I was too young to comprehend the situation

But I remember the scene perfectly

The snow lightly fell unto the ground

Gradually transforming the setting outside

I held my brothers hand as he struggled breathing

He took quick short breathes as his pale body quivered

I wished to do everything in my power to make him feel at ease

But my ideas always seemed to fail

As he took a final breath, he seemed calm and peaceful

I didn’t know I’d never see him again

I cried, thinking he was in pain

Yet I never knew it was quite the opposite.

 

© 2008 Monners


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What a powerful tale of sorrrow and pain. Yet your love for him shows. I sat by my father's bed the day he died, I to holding his hand in a hope to make him feel at ease. I was not there when his pain ceased later that night, but with my family on an Easter Eve. This is a strong prose of emotions here, thank you for sharing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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What a powerful tale of sorrrow and pain. Yet your love for him shows. I sat by my father's bed the day he died, I to holding his hand in a hope to make him feel at ease. I was not there when his pain ceased later that night, but with my family on an Easter Eve. This is a strong prose of emotions here, thank you for sharing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This was very poignant. You did not go into the hows and whys, but stuck simply with your own heart's feelings. I'm so sorry for your loss. This was a good piece. Rain..

Posted 16 Years Ago


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