Silence in the Rock

Silence in the Rock

A Poem by Ausheirn:)
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I tried to ask although I'm all alone. I thought I was insane, but silence was the mere one that keep on saying "I'm not".

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In the wide open sea,
Where you behold nothing.
The mere horizon,
Where the blue sky meets the City.

In the middle,
A narrow rock is.
The only place you can live in.
Can't go beyond it's limit.

Standing on the top.
Merely on top of the rock,
Can't go beyond the top nor down.
There, I've been all alone.

Destitute the semblance of what I don't have.
Curious of something.
Keep on asking. Can I go to the horizon ?
Can I live in the City ?

When can I walk away out of this limited narrow rock world ?

Where, silence is the only way of asking.

© 2017 Ausheirn:)


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Ausheirn:)
Anyone can review this, although I wrote this for my Contemporary Art subject.

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take out the punctuation and shape it of the breath of the poem, it has natural breaks. those could be better expressed through better word placement but i did like what it was about.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ausheirn:)

5 Years Ago

Yes, it was my first time. Thank you so much ^^
You've got maybe four complete sentences in this entire piece? You should probably fix that. In general, this feels scattered. Nice attempt, though.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ausheirn:)

5 Years Ago

Yeah, I know that's why I told you I did 'cause of the periods :D
Ethan

5 Years Ago

No, there are periods that shouldn't be there. Periods don't make complete sentences. You need both .. read more
Ausheirn:)

5 Years Ago

Hahah :D okay. Thank you.
I'll gotta go.
Silence is probably a question and also the answer for the question....
I liked this poem, it was unique. You created a nice imagery.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ausheirn:)

5 Years Ago

Hahaha :D thank you.
Najam Us Saher

5 Years Ago

You're welcome. ☺

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