The Raven's Dawn

There is a way she smiles, nods, leans,

Her look, her gaze, her lips, her hands,

should I mention the shoulder and how the right side of her hair slings down?



When you look, what can you see,

do you look for intent, background, hints, clues?

Are is there something that cuts the mind to something more simple,

how she smiles, laughs, slaps her hands on the table?



You want to hold her,

you need to kiss her,

she makes you want to be a better man.




Raven haired,

soft in touch,

lips in reach,

and all it takes is a single chance.









































Worth the chase, what?

Reviews

[Ranger Kessel]

good stuff my friend. dig the videos. Keep up the good work:)

[Corset]

lmao, worth the chase, do you appreciate what is handed to you more or what you have to work for? whaaaaaaaaaaat? Shoofly, oh hell on wheels, you are not so scary after all.

[A. Amos]

I absolutely love those verses,  very relateable! amazingly written and well expressed. 

[Shaquana Adams]

I think most people are easily intimidated and people who aren't at first might become that way over time. Nice job :)

[Ruth]

If they can be that man that can be better and grab the chance then yes...people seldom do and if they do...they seldom appreciate...like the imagery a lot here...has a sensual side as well as a risky side to it...cleverly done.

[purpleman17]

I found myself getting lost in this, but in a good way. The daydreams of lusting after someone, which we all have at some point as human beings, are being thrown out in the open in a way that I can really appreciate.

[Dye]

Always worth the chase, although sometimes the chase is better than the catch and the "illusion" is better than reality. It is nice to pick up on those mannerisms and notice them. Just noticed one little typo "Are is there" I believe it should be "And is there".

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Interesting poem...it is fun to question and analyze human beings based on their actions and aesthetic appeal.

[Deandra Dawn]

Absolutely beautiful......very lucky girl to have such words spoken about her.