Whitefreckles

we can see the time
through the window
the window
with
         its whitefreckles
(whitefreckles and i)    frown
my frownful
face
bespeckled with whitefreckles
and   i  
frown. time is absent
time is round
i see its freckles
and i frown.

Reviews

[Latifa]

I like the repitition of the term frown it gives the peom a vivid aspect despite it's meaning
I enjoyed thoroughly

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh my friend, oh dear
winter is barely here
you'll have to toughen up
it's the lot of being a Canuck

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

You may frown, but this poem made me smile.. Haha sorry for the tacky beginning, but it's true. There's such a whimsy and surreal quality to your writing. I love it. Whitefreckle is a captivating image/word..

[Mr.Boffin]

glad you liked it! :) had lots of fun writing it too