Mercenary

I have a boss who reminds me of my father, the man of whom I'm most afraid. I had a difficult week at work and wished for someone to help me.

               

 Come in, come in

Have a seat if you like

Ah, down to business already

Yes, I have it right here

Well encased in glass

As you can see

Such a pitiful little thing

Yet so powerful

You see, if I did not have it locked away

It could destroy me completely

Do not be fooled by it's unassuming nature

Do not be swayed by it's cries for pity

It is foul and wretched and evil

I must be rid of it

Tonight, if possible

Can you accomplish this for me?

Will you do this one, little thing?

I offer a generous payment

Anything else that you require and more

Please, I beg of you

Do not deny me or I shall perish!

I can feel it, even now and it is killing me
You must rid me, for once and for all, of it...

 

                

Author's Note

Per Zig's excellent suggestion, removed last line, "My fear." What do you think?

Reviews

[Steve Thompson]

I agree with Per Zig, because it adds a demention to the poem, that gives it more appeal to anyone. This could be about that one thing that is bothering someone, that they wish they could get out of there lives.
When I hear My fear, I think of a peticular-it takes away from the question...is this thing driving him crazy?

Good piece overall, good read!

[Lalli]

I felt like i should come by and show you some love my friend.. i've been a bit busy, but i found time today

I agree.. the fear is felt, doesn't really needed to be stated. If they don't get the fear aspect, then it leaves them hanging and wanting more as their thoughts a provoked to figure it out and hopefully they will..

mr. jodie, great write.. I like how it is i written as a poetic story, cleverly done my friend

much love n respect

-Lalli

[Pointblank]

I dunno, I think I might have kept the last line..."My fear". Stating it...saying it outloud. The utter admittance, Yet the final hurdle. I like it very much.

[zig]

yeah, i can relate. whenever i meet someone who reminds me of my father i have to get away from them as soon as possible, or else i end up beating the holy living s**t out of them. for me its not so much fear, as it is just plain hate. well stated poem, however, i didnt like the last line, seems a little over stated, i dont think you need it. i could feel the trepidation, the "walk on egg shells" through out the poem, the caution language, all of that really gets the fear across, you dont need to state it at the end. great work my friend... just my 2 cents. have great day. zig

[James K. Blaylock]

Fear can truly eat at our very souls! Another great write, I'm quickly becoming a huge fan.

jkb

[Melissa]

Fear is a mercenary isn't it. It destroys without thought or emotion. It's almost as lethal as hate is. I found this piece provocative, and mentally stimulating. It took me down a couple of paths and still left me reeling with the thought of how crippling our own fears can be.

[ElJays Nicholas]

Hi Jodie :) The poem speaks for just about every person on Earth right now. I think the answer to this hides in the question, where does fear come from? It is a question that only the heart can answer, from a perspective of universal love and the awareness that we are infinitely more than our beliefs will allow us to be. When we are able to do this, we can see that belief systems actually trap the essence of who we are as free, divine beings, and that those systems we box ourselves in mean nothing in the grand scope of life itself. They are rooms where we hide the sense of self within the mansion of all that is, if this makes any sense. Just my feelings on the subject. Much love and many blessings, my friend....

[DarkAngelWriter]

Wow. I love this, Mr. Jodie :)

[Stacy]

Nicely written

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

This is very interesting. What is it they say about nothing to fear but fear itself.... It is amazing how paralyzing fear can truly be - that something so awful or final or terrible will happen.... so many times we worry for reasons blown up in our minds.... So many times it is the result of power being overused.... intimidation..... Taking the time to take apart a situation usually will let you break the feared item/event into manageable parts..... haha.... most of the time... Now the unknown, well, that's a different story..... haha

Kath