The Rib of Him

The Rib of Him

 

And I long for him,

to be adjacent to the rib of him

just below the heart of him…

to feel the madness of the world dissipate within       
the circumference of his arms,

to hear the symmetry of his breathing with mine

                        so sweetly with mine,

as the orchestration of our hearts beat

like the hoofs of a thousand steeds

pulsing,

converging,

never- ending.

 

 

 

 

photography by Stefan Beutler

 

 

 

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Glides down the lines with this verse...the intensity building ever so...and takes you in the moment for the reader...liked the picture also goes with the theme of this design --- with the way you add the artistic presentation...I do suggest in the last line:

pulsing,
converging,
never ending.

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pulsing,
converging,
never-ending.

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give the last word a place all by itself...very minor...but appealing...with the hyphen...good day...

[Kelly Scheppers]

I like your suggestion, Glen...it is appealing to the eye...thank you!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...

[...]

Kelly, how lush and sublime this is. My goodness girl...YUM

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you Lynn...you've made my day!

[Lydia Shutter]

"The circumference of his arms" that is a line you have used before and I just adore it. In those arms, there is warmth, there is love, there is a safe haven. Sensual yet elegant. Wonderful, Kelly. Lydi**

[Kelly Scheppers]

You flatter me when you remember such lines...thank you so much, Lydi!

[ANTO]

There are so many layers here Kelly. We could come to this one in many different moods and be sated. Feeling particularly love-lorn I chose to focus on these words -
"to feel the madness of the world dissipate within
the circumference of his arms..." - sublime phrasing - I got the feeling of security, comfort, love and belonging from these. Superior writing my friend. Thank you for sharing.
:))

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am indebted to your kindness, Anto...thank you!

[R Smith]

wow! that's an intriguing and exciting poem Kelly, you rode over my emotions on those thousand steeds, just brilliant :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are most kind for saying so, Richard...thank you!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kelly ... A Pulitzer prize for the
best love poem ever. You have gently
touched the edge of the sky where
love lives. truly... Pat

[Kelly Scheppers]

I always know I'm in for something delightful, whenever I see that umbrella...thank you, Pat!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Kelly... I am so fortunate to
read your poetry. I posted a birthday
poem on WC for Lydia entitled
"Demurely through a veil". hugs Pat

[sereenaoutloud]

so romantic, beautiful! The format is brilliant . :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Sereena...how wonderful of you to say!

[sereenaoutloud]

i am a fan! :)

[Stonz P.]

The title was enough to lure me to read it and the poem does not disappoint..
I don't know why but it reminds me of Keats a lot... the way he wrote about passion...a very passionate read. And I do love how it flows into becoming one.. great write
Glad to have come across your work.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You mentioned Keats, that it reminded you of the way he wrote about passion. Thank you for seeing that...I am most thankful you crossed my path today!

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork and words.
"as the orchestration of our hearts beat
like the hoofs of a thousand steeds"
I like the feeling of want and contentment in your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am so thankful, John...

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Kelly.

[dan]

Kelly, I have to say when I first read the title that I thought of Adam and Eve (her coming from one of Adam's ribs) but you chose to highlight the rib for its adjacency to the heart, his mythical font of all love. The imagery is quite good, very descriptive...the piece flows so evenly and warmly that it made me let go an audible sigh. GREAT imagery in 'the hoofs of a thousand steeds.' Just a warm and beautiful write that will warm your readers' hearts (like mine). take care...dan

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Dan...you always give me reason to be proud of what I've done!