Wishing Puddle

I saw a puddle and it reminded me of a Wishing Well.

See that puddle on the ground

your wishes, there they shall be found.

You wish you may,

you wish you might.

I wish to find where my secrets lay,

even if, in the end, I shall have to pay.

This coin, here in my right hand

I will throw it in and watch it land.

The ripple effect will make me wonder,

prove to me all I feel is the hunger.

The need to know what my future holds,

should I look, should I see, fate already has me sold.

You wish you may,

you wish you might.

Today I looked into the wishing puddle,

my thoughts the images did muddle.

I saw today what nobody should,

pictures I'd erase if only I could.

You wish you may,

these thoughts you think lead far away

You wish you might,

for you must be careful what you wish tonight. 

Author's Note

Today while walking in the rain, I happened to see my reflection in a puddle. This puddle made me think of a wishing well, which in turn inspired this poem about a Wishing Puddle.

Tell me what you think. (:

Reviews

[KL]

Careful what you wish for... no matter how many times this can be told it always rings true. Be satisfied with what you have. The poem was good, colours reminded me of a rainy day, but watch your meter. It's all over the place and throws a rock into the river that is your flow. Remember to count syllables.

[Andrew Wright]

:) I like the concept you used here... oh what a rainy day can produce... I sometimes wonder why people don't like them so much. If something like this can come from one, I'll wish for rain as much as possible. Great write. :)

[Tim]

Nice twist on a wishing well and well done. Great picture to accompany it as well. 3 wells all in one comment. Or is that 4. Ha

[R E Tree]

The rhyme totally suit the poem and drag the reader into it straight away. I noticed some fonts in blue ad some in black. The colour has made it easier for me to visualise the puddle. You have used powerful words to make the puddle look myterious. It was a pleasure to read

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was fun and catchy and yes made a great point... everything we ned to know bout life we can find in nature, it can teach us the truth to happiness. A really fabulous piece.

[Dream Weaver]

I absolutely adore this one Cassi,
you are indeed taking your writing
to another level, great work :)