Lost

Ummm... I'm not sure, but I liked how it sounds. I went for the third person aspect, because I think it sounds interesting and less personal, I feel it adds another level that people are able to connect with it.

Sweet dreams turn into harmful nightmares
Leaving scarring images in his mind
Burnt in through the years of pain
The years of loneliness
The tears that stain his shirt
Fall from the dark eyes of a lost boy
All light has retreated and been lost
Leaving him with a soul blacker than the night itself
As he wanders the streets in a neverending daze
His past a distant memory
And his destination unknown
All he has are the two feet to carry his weight
No one by his side for friends can only hurt
And that is a lesson he knows all too well
Through those years before
When he was actually happy

Reviews

[Last Lying Look]

I really like this.
It's heartbreaking.
My favorite part is:
"All he has are the two feet to carry his weight
No one by his side for friends can only hurt
And that is a lesson he knows all too well
Through those years before
When he was actually happy"
I like this because I can relate to it.... completely.
This is a magnificent, sorrowful write.
I really, REALLY like it.
Great work!
-Elissa

[C. C. Burl]

What a piece. I enjoyed it, and not only for what it sounded like. I've had friends that have just left me for no logical reason that I can tell, and it seems that with time I only grow lonelier, and lonelier. Thanks a lot for the great write. I liked the third person as well. It does bring it to a different perspective: watching another person suffer, but seeing yourself in their suffering. Again, this is wonderful, quite a winner.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A lost soul? A wonderful piece and very thought pravoking.

[topsyturvy]

love how it sounds, and how you can make every painful experience, be put into something creative and beautiful... its ironic...