Bursting Light on Smouldering Horizons

Collaboration between myself and Gary H.

 

Light of my life bursts through bright morning sky
Shining so bright, know I am always nearby
Touching my soul, so desperate to fly
Through endless horizons, up in stratospheres so high

Cottonbud clouds shroud past regrets,
Magical hues of amourous golden rays
Holding thumbs for when we first met
Touching the face of my beloved far away.

Soft breeze of passion sees love swimming in the air
Vibrant winds craft our spirits as one
Hands express pure gentleness running through your hair
In soft crimson luminosity the sun sets to stun

Mischevious golden waves of inviting amber rays
Rainbow coloured butterflies sending honey kisses
Forever on fire, we dance, pulsate and sway
Flickering, fluttering through feelings of bliss

Smouldering skin, senuorous shoulders burn
Beating hearts between us feeling so close
Heat of the day says we never learn
Wanting you so much, thoughts to engross.

Eyes move in places never caught in the shade
Desire alive within soft splendorous airs
Love breathes forever in a breeze that never fades
Caught in a tender embrace forever shared

Sometimes sad raindrops explode on the pavement
Silent, foreboding washing away life
Watching them land sparkling with wry amusement
Deepening greys destructive sickening strife

Destiny will save us, locked within stares
Cries of the night birds fill the darkened hue
Flavours explode incandesecent with flair
Glimmering delights shine refelections of you

Fancies and musings of shimmering moonbeams
We are intimately touching in so many ways
Together at night in adoring dreams
Loving sighs always end our divided days

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

So we thought seeing that both our pieces seemed so closely connected we would join them and see what happens. Hope you all enjoy!

Reviews

[Candle in the wind]

The two have blended into one and cant be distinguished as seperate entities.The images are very vivid andexude a certain glow the poem has its own rhytm and melody.
"soft crimson luminosity " is a beautiful sensual expression.The wind seems vibrant with the sound of heartbeats and the hues and shades blend so well.

[Jd Young]

Beautiful and engaging. My mind drifts off into anothe rplace that I can't seem to put in words. But this poem has give it music that seems to change the world in a different way. I commend this work as something straight out of a William Blake Collection. The imagery is pristine, and magical. I felt as if I was there, in that place, looking out onto a pathway of visions, dreams, and ultimately, those smouldering horizons. Beautiful.

I felt the connection of these people. It was different than most bonds between the human and the heart. You both did a splendid job of capturing this feeling. I hope that your further writings go abaove and beyond what I imagined in this piece.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A very nice read. It is softly sensual and lingering.

[OrAnGe SmArTiEs]

I loved the origanals n i love this!!!
Good idea for joining them together!
The two join beautifully together and you two did really well!

[Kathleen Marie]

What an excellent piece and what a great - somewhat of a collaboration! Wonderful!

[Steven Williams]

I would not have known it was a collaboration if you had not said it was. Great write!

~Stephen

[Maxwell]

Alright, well now that I see it as complete, I take back my comment on "Bursting Light" about the transition. Previous reviewer is right, these are blended together very well. The combined poem is easily better than either of the two individually.

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This collaboration takes two very good poems and in their fusion creates a piece that transcends their individual strengths and soars to a new level.

The interwoven lines function like the intertwining of two lovers' bodies and souls.

[Joseph - Michael]

It's like I've said before; a poem written by one poet, it's all in depends, but any poems written by two or more poets, they always come out really good or better. So, this writing is more than really good; It's great and I enjoyed it very much so...

Keep on working together and you'll be surprise how things will turn out...

[John Parker]

Very nice colab......your styles mix very well and it's been a pleasure reading as always........hope to read more from both of you here in the near future.........thanks for the read request.....

[Fantasyfairy]

The two work so well togther that they are unseperable. They appear to be one piece of work, and of one mind and heart, making this such a special and beautiful poem of love. XX