The Cliff in Shadow

A little mythological fantasy poem and experiment. I usually don't write poems like this- tell me what you think: "On the Cliff of Morandon pridefully stood the Castle of Morr..."

The Cliff in Shadow

On the Cliff of Morandon pridefully stood the Castle of Morr

Its righteous rule over its subjects ordered by the king was good

Overlooking the plains and dark ocean which bordered the shore

Only an ignored factor of position did not strike his lordship as it should

The Shadow of the Night set from the stars clouded the Cliff of Morandon

Altered the hearts of men and played the chords of evil upon their soul

Silently uprooting the kingdom from the tree of good into where there are none

For it was smoldering in the peaceful castle down to and through the coal

As the ages sailed by in the stocky boat of life, the cliff in shadow fell

Its righteous rule diminishing as each king passed his crown to the next

Now there was no man, woman, or child the ruler’s death wouldn’t tell

All creatures on the Cliff of Morandon were now inevitably vexed

The stars who let the Shadow of the Night fall held a council of this evil

Revolution sprouted among them and lit up the sky in heavenly battle

The smallest of two groups trying to undo the shadow if be their will

The War of the Lights enforced the killing of men like sick, wounded cattle

As the astronomical scrimmage took place, time slowly marching onward

Men took no heed to the constellation’s war front and went on in Shadow

Unknown to them, the kings were given a host by the heavens to him guard

An assortment of good, earth-bound warriors to surround the king in follow

Wars draw to a close when the balls of fire filling the sky hold peace

Treaties are presented in the arena above the minds of men

Will the blood, the battles, the beings of star-like bodies ever cease?

If men are to be released of their own prison, the council will be again

And so was the Cliff in Shadow.

Author's Note

Hey guys! I just wanted to say I have tons of poems ready to publish, and I will be putting a new one out every two days. So, make sure to peek in every two days! Thanks to everyone who comments, or even reads :)

James

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Once again, your authors note won me over. How can I NOT read someone who's so enthusiastically presenting his work to us? Once again, I'm torn becuz of my likes & dislikes. I usually don't like reading these kinds of poems becuz a big war-like epoch just feels boring to me. There's so much war that bombards us daily, why write & glorify any of it? But aside from that, I still have to say that your writing is unexpected . . . you say many of the same similar sentiments that are often found in these kinds of poems, but you have a unique way of expressing yourself, so that your poems don't really sound like anything I've ever read & this, to me, is what we're all hoping for (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank you for your review and kind words, but most of all, thank you for your honesty. It shows you're not just saying the stuff you're saying, but actually speaking from the heart.

James