Blindsided.

Glimpses like little flashes into moments and thoughts.

Blindsided.

Emotions unknown.

Too much.

Why? 

Who?

What?

Where?

Blindsided.

Numb.

Even with the pain.

Chest feels like it has been ripped out.

No Mercy. No Remorse.

Cold dead fingers gripping.

Clawing.

Blindsided.

Vacant eyes staring.

At what?

At nothing.

Seeing but not seeing.

Breathing?

Trembling fingers cling desperately to chest.

Heartbeat felt.

But the feeling of -being- was not.

Being? - What?

Nothing?

Blindsided.

Tired!

TIRED!

The same s**t different day.

Nothing to be accomplished.

Nothing to fight for!

NO ONE to fight for?!

Blindsided.

Three days.

Blindsided.

Too much.

Blindsided.

F**k this!

Blindsided.

F**K YOU!

Blindsided.

F**k them.

Blindsided.

...F**k me…

Blinded.

Heavy.

Heavier than anticipated.

Actions becoming real.

Realizations. Thoughts. Life. Synchronizing.

Cold metal filled warm mouth.

Eyes clamped shut.

Blindsided.

This is it!

Blindsided.

No it’s not!

Blinds- NO it’s not!

Blindsided.

F**k this s**t.

Blindsided.

Who are you?

Blindsided.

Who am I?

Blindsided.

Desperation.

Turned into haste!

NO time to waste.

No more thoughts.

Just reactions.

Blindsided.

I’m over it.

Blindsided.

A pause.

Poignant. 

It’s not too late!

Blindsided.

F**k this s**t!

I’m over it.

Blindsided.

A pause.

Eyes close.

Blindsided.

A sigh.

Jaded. 

Exhausted.

 No moment's hesitation.

Blindsided.

...F**k..

-Sound of gun resonated-

As it is the final straw.

There is no more.

Period.

Reviews

[adichie]

Woah!!!

This verse feels like an anchor, attached to a long, thin cord that leads you to the true weight, the true heft of the piece. Down and down and down we go from pressure to pressure (and by now we’re fully immersed, and our temples are pounding with it all), only to get to the dramatic end with a clink, and a click.

What, girl? I have places to go today, but I need more.

Deb 😎

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

Thank you so much for your review!

Haha, I love your interpretation. Familiarizing this with an anchor is perfect. Haha! Thank you so much for your kind words!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you write. A deep coldness and honest tone to your words. I read three of your poems. Each allowed the reader to fall into hard situation with a logical ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I do like your name on the site. Nefertiti.
Coyote

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

Thank you so much for your receive and kind words!!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I enjoyed your work.

[JR]

I like the stream-of-consciousness style. The poem moves very quickly and takes the reader on the same spiral down. Repetition of "blindsided" is effective too... as a reader, you start paying attention and getting sucked in by the lyric quality to it. Poignant ending as well. A quick drop, then the end.

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahmes]

As always I appreciate your review!

I love your intuition. I was hoping the reader could feel and get the same glimpses as the person experiencing this. I wanted this to be like flashes. Moments into the persons head up until they pull the trigger. Thank you once again for your review!

[JR]

I think it totally works that way. It reads fast too, and I think all of that lends a sense of disquiet. The eye expects longer lines... nice touch.