When I am Done

When I am Done

 

When I am done

What 

Shall I miss most

I wonder

Maybe blue sky 

And sea

Green grass and

Yellow sun

Your lips on mine

Who knows

Perhaps 

Not to mention 

Gentle hugs

Being 

Called dad

Being a brother

A partner and

Friend

A husband and 

Lover

Hey, did I ever

Mention those

Fingertips ..

Oh’ yeah 

So I did, but on 

A different page

Entirely ..

Just maybe 

Somewhere tween

Blue sky and sea ...

 

Author's Note

I am not a robot ........ but might as well be .................................................... N:)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

It's interesting that your poem assumes a dead person will be capable of feeling anything. I'm with Chris. I think it'll be a whole bunch of nothing forevermore while those remaining easily & quickly forget I ever existed. But it's always fun to pretend that we matter more than we omnipotent humans do *wink! wink!* fondly, Margie

[Neville]

in an attempt to try & paraphrase the words of Mr. Arnold Schwarzenegger .. I like to think I will be back ... its what we Buddhists like to think anyway (NUGs) fondly, Me :)

[mattavelli]

Hello, Neville! :)
This poem was striking what struck me most was the punctuation as I was reading it I kept thinking how much easier it would be if there were punctuation; and bang, there it was. Haha

[Neville]

.............. I wouldn't want you to feel cheated .. now would I .. maybe I just knew you had a thing about commas and full stops ...

:)

[lightsong]

We will MISS your fingertips on pages but NOT yet dear N, tooooo wayyy early :) and You wrote this in the simplest way but that way that can affect us all... stay blessed, keep being all of that, and KEEP YOUR FINGERTIPS ON PAGES ❤️

[Neville]

...... how very touching dear lightsong .. and so very much appreciated too by this old fella :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you might just miss all of these equally...
I am at that point that these thoughts occur to me now.

I would miss so much, mostly friends and the simple but rewarding life I feel I have been lucky to have.

[Neville]

......... I can feel it, see it and hear it jacob .. its good to have it confirmed by you tho sir ... cheers

N.

[Chris Shaw]

When I am done, I hope I miss no one. and nothing else which I love in life. A state of nothingness will suit me well. You have written a really thought provoking piece here Neville.

Chris

[Neville]

these words just kind of found me while I was sitting on a sea wall earlier ..
thought provoking does it for me.. thank you Chris

[Chris Shaw]

It was a lovely day for pondering on the sea wall. Night Neville.

[Chris Shaw]

I have been pondering on these lines ya know. Thinking about them carefully. Trying to imagine where you were coming from. I understood them to mean after death, in which case if in the next world I could reflect on what has gone before, I would rather not. Simply because those special people and things would be too painful in the missing. If however you are simply considering the past and life's experiences
and are in a state of reflection on your life, then I would think they would be a great comfort to you and every single one of them would be gold dust. So many good things in life to cherish even when the going gets tough. Yes, I pondered more and came back. That is what a great poem can do. Gets you thinking when you are away from it :)

[Neville]

............. How extraordinarily bloomin kind of ya Chris ...... I do believe that we come back .. but in the meantime, am all for a bit of reflection
.................. Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

You know I think I may have mentioned my fear of sharp steel and the sound of a blade being drawn. I am sure I died a violent death in medieval times:)

[Neville]

even stranger .. I have an almost phobic & presumably irrational fear of women with knives ..
.. on another note, but maybe related .. I am convinced I was around at least in the 7th century and served our country during WW1 ............
:)

[Chris Shaw]

Well my friend, it looks as though we are doing the rounds.I wonder how many more times till we get to rest in eternal peace?

Seeing we've both got a bit of a thing about cold steel (I would run a mile from it), you have no fear that I will use it on you. You are safe from me:) Rest easy.

[Neville]

................ I am suitably reassured .. ta Chris

[Fay Slimm]

Yes when the end comes those are the things in life we will miss Nev - nature's glory and love's rewards - a lovely list of unforgettables - thanks for the depth of this needed reminder to enjoy every moment while we can.....................x

[Neville]

thank you my friend .. a most welcome visit and such kind words too :)

[Poetic Beauty]

In my personal belief when life is over we will be peaceful and content in Heaven or whatever afterlife you believe in.

This is an deep thinking thoughtful poem about wondering. This poem has made me think deeply and ponder how or what I might feel when life moves into a new dimension.

[Neville]

what more could one ask for .. thank you PB n true :)

[Poetic Beauty]

You are definitely most welcome!!