Drawing a Line in the Sands of Time

Drawing a Line in the Sands of Time

A Poem by Astro
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Another societal metaphor.

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Billions of reaching hands in need
grasp the knotted rope of Time
each twisted point an era or age
of human evolution and thinking.

Between each ball tightly weaved
like those silken beliefs of the day
existed divergent threads sowing
past those hemlines of uniformity.

Rebellious fabrics like a patchwork
form changing styles and ideology
to separate men as they are worn
swaddling new beginnings to grow.

On and on goes a braided progress
with stubborn hands clutching firm
to old ideas that have less meaning
in a world of continual development.

Other hands eagerly pull us forward
without contemplation of the design
of that new fabric insisting strength
exists without the weight of reason.

Mankind's pitty-pat game of grasping
serves only to tighten white knuckled
fists as they swing about on the rope
of tangled intentions forming a noose. 

© 2013 Astro


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History repeats itself unfortunately, but you've written it so poignantly Astro...last stanza is killer and you wrap up it up in a nice little bow, or rope as you would have it....well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Astro

7 Years Ago

Thanks Frieda, glad you liked it!
"Mankind's pitty-pat game of grasping

serves only to tighten white knuckled

fists as they swing about on the rope

of tangled intentions forming a noose. "~ You have weaved an intriguing rope... this was tied beautifully together... Profound end, to a brilliant write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Astro

7 Years Ago

Thank you Robbie you are very kind. I'm 'Knot' just saying that. ;)
Robbie~xoxo~

7 Years Ago

Cute! (he he)

I truly enjoyed reading this piece. x:)
Astro

7 Years Ago

Well thank you again.
bleak AND beautiful..................................

Posted 7 Years Ago


Astro

7 Years Ago

Well thank you Doc. It is a bit of both I'd have to admit.
And yet they still can't see the ill fitting garments they weave. Very cool my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Astro

7 Years Ago

Thanks Jack, it's like women who choose to keep wearing shoes that hurt their feet.
Realivent deep and profound great stiff here sir

Posted 7 Years Ago


koty bell

7 Years Ago

I enjoyed it very much sir keep up the good s**t man
Astro

7 Years Ago

I'll do my best, thanks again.
koty bell

7 Years Ago

No problemo
This is so realivent and so good that I could not decide what to highlight.. I wanted to re-post every line to you..I love the ending.. "serves only to tighten white knuckled
fists as they swing about on the rope
of tangled intentions forming a noose. "

so many excellent couplets..and lines.. shallimarRose

"silken beliefs" of the day
existed divergent threads sowing
past those hemlines of uniformity."
braided progress
"with stubborn hands clutching firm
to old ideas that have less meaning
in a world of continual development."

Posted 7 Years Ago


Astro

7 Years Ago

Well thank you very much ShallimarRose, I too believe in its inherent relevance and it is my attempt.. read more

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Added on August 29, 2013
Last Updated on August 30, 2013
Tags: Society, Time, Progress, Division, Poetry, Politics

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