A Fool in Love

Inspired by Kate Voegele's Only Fooling Myself.

 

I’m only fooling

Myself as I look as you,

Watching my heart die

As I see you walking

From my life forever now.

 

Author's Note

Tanka: Syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7
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I have to thank Caffine for this part because I don't think I would have known what to do with this haiku (tanka) if I didn't think of that poem you did with the syllable count. ^_^ ..And this poem just came to me. Oh, should I change the last line?

Reviews

[Larissa G.]

Quite a blunt little thing. I'm not quite sure what to think about this one, because despite its emotion, it feels incomplete. I'm not sure. Perhaps it should not be a Tanka and should follow a different format?