The fake smile

As she walks by , she wants to cry

She never thought he would leave her alone to die

Cursing to her self is her only lullaby

Only if he knew how she really felt about him

Sadly, she cant talk to him cause its just too Grim

 

Reviews

[A.Lee]

I like this poem. I disagree with the previous comment, I thought it sounded fine. Good for a short poem.

[Ethan Paz]

Good poem. However, line one and two sound forced and so did line three and four. What I mean is it sounds like you forced it to rhyme for it didn't flow smoothly as a transition. Good point and good story. Good job.