I would

I would

A Poem by Nikki
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I smiled as you smiled

even though i didnt want to

you tell me you hate me

i act like it doesnt hurt

i tell you i love you

you frown and walk away

in the end you dont love me the way i love you

i cant stop even though its true

i love you

© 2009 Nikki


Author's Note

Nikki
spelling mistakes and such ignor plz :)

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This is another very heartfelt piece. I like the way you've written it. I am sorry that you're ignoring spelling and grammar mistakes. The power and emotions in this piece are just fantastic. You've made it very easy for readers to feel what you're feeling as you write. The spelling and grammar just pulls away from the overall flow of the piece. Though, with this piece, they are not too bad, and the flow itself makes me feel as though I'm watching two people have this interaction. I know I've been there, only he walked away, and I still love him. It is a very hard situation to be in.

Best of luck! Nice work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is another very heartfelt piece. I like the way you've written it. I am sorry that you're ignoring spelling and grammar mistakes. The power and emotions in this piece are just fantastic. You've made it very easy for readers to feel what you're feeling as you write. The spelling and grammar just pulls away from the overall flow of the piece. Though, with this piece, they are not too bad, and the flow itself makes me feel as though I'm watching two people have this interaction. I know I've been there, only he walked away, and I still love him. It is a very hard situation to be in.

Best of luck! Nice work!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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