Today

Far above expectations

Low below dreams

Lies the harsh reality

That goes unseen

How I wish for hope

How I wish for smile

Which went far away

For quite a few while

Where once stood love

Now sits hate

Expectations are curse

The ultimate fate

Standing back on feet

I stare my world

Emotions gets better of me

Which makes me wanna hurl.

Reviews

[Ravenwing]

Good start. I would suggest to keep a steady rhythm, such as 'for a while' or 'for quite a while' (instead of 'for quite a few while' because to me it seems awkward, beat-wise). The rhymes are not a bad start. Sometimes if I need a rhyme I use online rhyming lists or a thesaurus. But it is a good start and these are just suggestions. You have a voice in you! Keep writing! :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u So much. Even i use them for references

[Ravenwing]

No problem and cool:)

[Kuldeep desai]

nice well written.........

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u sir

[Gurleen Saluja]

Where once stood love
Now sits hate
Expectations are curse
The ultimate fate

very well written sir.. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Ur Welcum Maam :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Where once stood love
Now sits hate
Expectations are curse
The ultimate fate

The older I get the more I realize that emotions must be free to be felt but never given any thought. if that makes sense. An insightful and expressive write.

[Nitesh Mahabal]

thnks alot maam

[Luximir]

Very much enjoyed this, I really like ending, such a very unique way to end the poem haha. Love it!

[Nitesh Mahabal]

thnk u so mch sir

[Luximir]

No Problem :)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

You used few words to describe lots of facts. Thats impressive, because we shouldn't use 10 words where we can use 9. I like it

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Thank u so mch maam