Addicted

So what am I addicted to?

Seeds of death, sown in each soul
In the baby, the young , the very old
Walk past the streets , do your daily task
Can you all feel, life, flowing past?

Life revolves mundane , three storied offices
In absence of love, Lucy's are paid
Can purchased breasts , synthetic kisses feel same
O what will I do now, My life's in vain.

Why haven't I, taken a tour of the world?
Read all those books, Watched all those slides
Treasured all those girls, who wanted to be mine
Looked at expensive mirrors, praised when I had time.

I have an illness , strange and wise
Medicine unprescribed , doctors denied
Compare a lightning flash to dim candlelight
Addicted to life, I don't want to die.



© Nothing Personal. January 03, 2011.

Author's Note

Hair of the Dog Prompt - Tap # 1

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

(I thought I reviewed this before...but maybe I just read it...) It was good for a second read...I love what you do anyway, so it's no surprise! Great work, I especially liked:
"Can purchased breasts , synthetic kisses feel same"
and
"I have an illness , strange and wise
Medicine unprescribed , doctors denied
Compare a lightning flash to dim candlelight
Addicted to life, I don't want to die"

[Richard Williams]

Finely written with style, sharp turns and edges that imprint the imagination.

[Siddhartha]

Wow!!! A wonderful poem with an outstanding last stanza...And I disagree with the opinion that it needs to rhyme more...Not necessarily..

P.S.-In the first line of the second stanza-What i feel is that either "revolves" is to be replaced by "involves" or written as "revolves around"...Just my perspective though there might be a reason which I had completely overlooked...

[GreenSkeleton16]

i rather like this one! you had some parts rhyme and then some not...like u skipped paragraphs!! it would be nice it u made it all rhyme but its still good!

[Calypso]

Amazing! This is so vivid and well written. So different from what you would expect from a poem called 'Addicted'.

[KAREN]

Solid as can be! We all need to be addicted to life!

[George Love]

Love your imagery, and the protest against the proposed death by neglect or lack of insurance.

[Dream Slave]

Very good piece here, it shows how the world instead of flesh has all become plastic. There is no emotions anymore, there is just financial pros and cons. "If I do this for you, what can you do for me?" There is nothing done anymore, just for the sake of it. The way that it should be... Driven by impulse and not by calculations when it comes to living.

[Stef Outsiders]

Brilliant!!!

[Kaitlyn]

good job!