Love Race

I miss you

But I hear you have somebody new

Whatever happened to us beau?

I suddenly turned to that gal you once knew?

She must be a pretty dime

To commit the perfect crime

Stealing your heart and breaking mine

Remember Perfect Two?

I know it's a little late

But i realize i'm a fool

A fool to let my heart say yes

A fool to believe you thought I was a jewel

But wow, did I come last 

In this love race

For you it was just lust

For me, my heart gave you trust

At first was I a must?

Then i became a just?

Just there

To wear and tear

To take all and leave bare

Then I get the boot

The short stick

The hive ho

Should I say more?

Am I not a sad case?

Entering and losing this love race

Author's Note

I don't know if I get reviews or what kind I'll get but if I do, don't sugar coat anything, tell me your thoughts about this. I'm not exactly a poet.

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Hey, all of us have come last at some time in our lives.
Get up, deep breath, go forward. He's obviously not worth it.
An insightful and heartfelt piece of writing.
Very well done.

I spotted a couple of small typos . Small 'i' should be capital.
and did you mean line 5. dame and not dime. Not a biggy. It didn't take away from the poetry.

[Leeci]

I could feel your hurt and pain reflected in this poem . I also liked the rhythm of this poem, that almost each line you created rhymes. also, this poem sounded very sincere and real to me, nicely done :)