To Describe It In Words

An Attempt To Encapsulate That Feeling In Its Entirety

She’s that eternal sorceress
Who anoints me with the precious ointment extracted from her heart
Placing it on my head causing epiphanies
Revealing the true man in me
Now she raises me UP
A true resurrection
From the death of the old me
So how can I reply
To such a Butterfly
 
She’s that silent rain
That does not fall on your windowpane
But has its droplets drop on my crown
Those droplets cascade down my crown
Making me KING
Drenched I rise to my throne
The waves of her rain brought me here
So what can I say
To such a Mermaid
 
She’s that canvas
And I’m her Painter
So at midnight when we come together
We create a masterpiece
As I
Stroke
My paintbrush upon her
She’s my muse and my workstation
So what smile should I give
To this Mona Lisa

She’s that distant star
Who seduces me with her astronomy
As luminous lights form her hips
She attracts me with her constellation
As she has granted only me
With a telescope to view such beauty
Only I can wish upon a star
As a lone astronomer in this city
So what wish should I bestow
Upon a Virgo

Author's Note

Please Be As Honest And Frank As Possible. I Need To Hear FULL Criticism

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing words made the photo come alive. The description was very good. I had to read the poem a few times for the strong words and statements were outstanding.
"She’s that canvas
And I’m her Painter
So at midnight when we come together
We create a masterpiece"
Thank you for sharing this excellent poem.
Coyote

[Mbali]

Lovely, very strong wording.

[Dushyant Thadani]

Very interesting write. The last line Upon A Virgo was very different and just kept me thinking about the poem from the start to the end. It is quiet a good write. Good work Combs.

[Chris38]

I found this breathtaking. It is complex and requires I think a few readings to take it all in. There is some wonderful use of words in this.

[TallerThanLife]

This is nice. The play on words is just wonderful. Credit to you