Chic Resilience

No more shall I be a slave to your superficial beauty, for beneath the skin dwells something so repulsively disturbing I must avert my eyes at all cost.

Besotted with envy, ambivalence is destroying your once mortal soul. The very essence of attractiveness lasts forever is all but an absurdity.

I loved you for what and who you were, it’s now apparent you are no longer you, but a prisoner of you’re own vanity…

My heart withers, secretly crying for the unpretentious love you once knew. Deficient now of this I must bid you a poignant adieu…

Reviews

[quinfinn]

beautifully crafted slap to the jaw of a vain and pretentious woman. i love it.
can i get in line? just kidding...well done!

[Goodbye]

Good depiction of the disappointment at learning who someone really is.

[Ladysue]

Ah yes what is in the heart and soul is what is everlasting...great write...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

commanding write laying bare the unpleasent character of jealousy~envy~ which all stem from extreme ack of self confidence disguised as vanity~

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A woman holding on to her youth and beauty..I agree an unattractive trait but in this current society, it's easy to be drawn into the game. well written

[Amy Bumpas]

Beauty is only skin deep, and eventually we see what is
really there and not blinded. Sometimes, we don't find out the
vainess of it until it's too late and our heart gets hurt in
return.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Ah, I read a same kind of poem just now. Seems like it's 'Letting-go' day :D :) I see your vocabulary has increased, which is a good thing. Also, you have used the newly learned words in proper places and manner - which is a little tricky. So, kudos for that too.

But one thing I found disturbing was.. The whole poem can be shrunk into a stanza. Bigger text size doesn't make the poem mean much. I'd say simpler, the better. I would recommend a Terza Rima or Rhyme royale (Decent rhyming formats). Employ tetrameter (If possible and willing, an iambic verse too). If you wish to maintain it the same, it's good too :)

Keep writing.

[Liza]

wow; a man that opened his eyes to what lies beneath a beautiful self serving woman...
many men fall over themselves for something so delicious looking...
to just but get a taste
but this man seems to understand how he lost his head on his head for the head on his weee weee lol

[Seashell]

And good thing too !!! :D