No Longer

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Reviews

[Bubo]

Such sorrow, a community of souls lost to love and pain, you have written a beautiful piece, and a place we have all been too.

[Goodbye]

Beautiful - all those anxieties communicated well - do we trust, or will our hearts get blown to smithereens? And can we take it yet another time?

[Jeff]

A heartfelt poem. It's very good.

[My Fair Lady]

Touching words from kindred friend. You seem to write me.

[Geralyn Miller]

Highly emotional, a good peice, so I am going to be nit-picky. In the last line of the third verse, wouldn't it be "Too many times than I care to reveal"? Every thing I see is very small, a forgotten apostrophe in the plural "other's"; and forgotten punctuation. This work is worth polishing so it shows it's very best.

[Brooke Wake]

Very honest work here. You lay your words out like chalky bones...you put it on the line. Keep emoting what rises, as you do, and you will go far.

[Ladysue]

this is a genuine heartfelt piece of writing. I think many will be able to relate to this...I especially love the hope that comes through in this piece...good writing...

[Buddhistboy73]

Ok, so aside from the third stanza where there is a need for an instead if a...this to me is a great, heartfelt write...you really do a good job of bringing out the emotions here...and the imagery is fantastic. I love the penultimate stanza, and the message that behind the despair there is a light of hope....:)
Great write...

[Seashell]

"Faith" is the word that sticks out here for me. Amongst all the trials and tribulations in life.....we need faith...and it's obvious in this wonderful piece that that indeed will pull one through.

Thanks for share

Babs xx

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem speaks of many people in this world. I am one of those you speak of and that is why I hold on to the one person who still doesn't judge me or my family. The one person who understands me when the rest of the world looks at me with question. This poem speaks to me on so many levels. This stanza alone makes a strong statement.

My weakness is love, my demise is a
emotive heart abused and battered
too many times that I care to reveal.

I know that I want to have some one close to me to love and to trust but I have been hurt so many times by so many people that the one person whom likes me for who I am is the only person in this world that I am strong enough to let into my heart and keep my heart for with him it will always be safe even if we aren't together. You have out done yourself on showing true sad emotions, and showing in this poem just how human even men can be.