Someday

Someday people will not have a mouth

or maybe then i will not have ears anymore.

Someday all houses will have their doors wide shut

and i will have been left outside!

But just then all roads will be open and all those fierce dogs will be tied.

Neither eyes will i have ..nor heart...

only my soul and feet.

Someday the favours will be vanished like black crows

and they will take away my chains upon their wings.

And I...free from emotions...

without beloved ones...

...will have wings on my feet

and rivers in my soul

and I'll be heading to where Hope is calling me...

to the perpetual escape from salvation.

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

Yes, I often wonder if we are inside the goldfish bowl looking out, or the reverse. We all look for an escape from something in our lives it is like living in a pass the parcel world.

I like this poem it reminds me of ME

I do feel however that you could delete the word BLACK before crows....as the black wings are mentioned in the very next line

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you for your constructive review!
You are right about the word BLACK! It seems that I didn't notice it at all since the poem is a translation from the original greek one that I wrote two years ago and in that poem there was just "WINGS" because of the previous use of BLACK.
Thanks for pointing it out :)

[Neon]

May be then "Black whole"'' come.. lol if human won't have anything you did mentioned .. or may be one day the whole man'd be disappear .. lol Anyway.. liked your flow of writing. Good sense you've ued here mentioning the humankind .. about life or about "SOMEDAY". Beautiful work.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you Neon!

[Sami Khalil]

"And I...free from emotions...

without beloved ones...

...will have wings on my feet

and rivers in my soul"

A very nice poem. I like those lines the most...:)

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you Sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[AmandaN]

Beautifully put.
" wings on my feet and rivers in my soul..."
Love it! Thanks

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you very much Amanda! You are very kind :D

[Horizons]

I liked the write you dropped in your words. Well structured write.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thanks! I'm glad you like it

[Relic]

I enjoy a good poem with good metaphors and imagination. We all want to escape at one time or another and be alone. The need for freedom is important at times. I like this, nice job.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you very much :)

[Relic]

You're welcome.