DANCING WITH THE SEA

A poem about a man watching his love dancing with the sea on the beach.

Her silhouette glows in the moonlight
As she dances
With the waves of the sea,
Crashing between her feet
Like bubbling Champaign
Kissing garnet strawberries,
Beneath the dark of the breeze.

The moist
Billion-year-old grains of sand
Hold her hand
Guiding her home
To dry land.

Dancing with the sea
Has tired her perfect form.
As she looks for footprints left by
Her own.

Reviews

[@_av_poetry]

Your poem has lovely imagery and flows very nicely. The only thing I would mention is the structure being a little random. In this case it doesn't take anything from the meaning and it remains lovely but its maybe something to consider working on. I especially like the metaphor of Champaign kissing strawberries. Good job :)