DAUGHTER OF NIGHT

Its something that i wrote as a beginner and the first of mine to get published. This one tuk birth from my over devotion to nyx.

Carved from the wings of ravens

she shone like polished onyx

chortling and gliding through the endless night

she entered into my dreamless sleep

her auburn hair,graceful like the niagra showers

and her skin,smooth and gilded

like the kiss of sun's loving rays

her eyes like a shining mirror

but which broke as i looked

shattered into thousand shards

shattering my dream

but still she was..

somewhere in the dark

looking at me

as she shied away from the sun's warmth

and hid behind the folds of dark

waiting...

still waiting for me

Reviews

[siddhi]

After reading full of imagination i liked it keen to see what are you writing next

[Parvathy Nandan]

thankyou so much siddhi :)

[M P Ramesh]

Parvathy,
The daughter os night is expecting a son named DAY
watch out
Hope you are familiar with Attoor Ravivarma and his poetry


CARRY ON....
m p rAMESH

[Chirag Kumar]

I think it should be "Niagara showers". Do take care of punctuation. It shall only enhance your poetry's quality. Again a fine piece of work!

[Parvathy Nandan]

thanks a lot for the correction ...criticisms and corrections are always constructively welcome

[Solar]

This like the onyx is a very polished gem of writing - alight with mystique!

Just a question about 'fold's of dark' or should it have been 'folds of dark'?

Vivid lines these:
'her eyes like a shining mirror
but which broke as i looked'

[Parvathy Nandan]

yes u r ryt,it was meant to b folds, typing mistake..my bad.... You have a very keen sense of observation.... :D

[Solar]

You are welcome. That is what I find good about members on this site - the exchange - and I have been grateful to other eyes picking out areas of improvement, editing in my writing.

[SuspectGray]

After reading your bio it seems this poem is a reflection of the two parts of you...the dutiful one and the dreamer.

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you for the comment!