Vains

a token of love for my best friend who is hidden beneath these lines

Cheer beneath contempt

tear beneath the grin

fear beneath facade

dilemma now and then

cruel eyes cast thee

and hidden behind thy mask

but revel to sight mine

true like ancient seer

beneath the grey and dark

liveth the soul sweetest

liveth thy soul my friend...

Reviews

[Ashwin Shanker]

Use of words like thee, thy, thou... Well, always fascinated me but I dont know how many people actually use these anymore.

However, they give you poem a classic feel to it, and the flow was also nice.

[Parvathy Nandan]

Well its archaic, and its different... and like sove mentioned, its fascinating as well...
thank you for the review

[Riddhi]

I should appreciate you use of words which i always appreciate and here most like use of liveth , thee...
It makes me feel as if i am reading a poem by Shakespeare due to similar Style of using words....
Another Great work...
Eager to read your next writing...
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing....

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you riddhi, im updating all my writings in my blog, du read thru and leav a comment if you find it good :) http://mimblewimbleblog.wordpress.com

[Riddhi]

Ya...i will try to read them....

[siddhi]

I enjoy these pieces well done
never leave writing


from
siddhi

[Parvathy Nandan]

never will :) writing is smthng dat makes me cmplete.... no way without it :)

[M P Ramesh]

OParvathy,
The points of reading can not be deciphered
the writing fulfils its journey and purpose in reader's mind.


Its nothing a floating on the surface

carry on


M P Ramesh

[Chirag Kumar]

You've created an air of mysticism around your poem. Well written..!!

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you :) apparently the intention was hiding the person from the readers.... d person fr whum i wrote ds z d only one whu cud decifer the true meaning ....much like a magic scroll...thanks again :)